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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2005-03-11 07:40 PM



we still are

hidden
in the night

in secret
special places
meeting
sadness
briefly stayed

what words we use
are not heard—
above understanding
the autumn moon

with dawn’s soft light
we go again

back to no return


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passing shadows
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1 posted 2005-03-11 08:25 PM


cool write
Juju
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2 posted 2005-03-11 11:43 PM


I like this.
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3 posted 2005-03-12 07:14 AM


Enjoyed

Andrew

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4 posted 2005-03-12 12:55 PM


I like this.
JamesMichael
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5 posted 2005-03-14 07:03 PM


Enjoyed...James
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6 posted 2007-05-01 01:32 PM


war.

"with dawn’s soft light
we go again

back to no return"

some of your peoms, like peacock, are with a heavy and singnificant tail that makes a whole thing more attractive and a beauty and an extraodiary and it flashes back more light to already beautiful body and head.

try to find mor and better words next time.

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