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ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

0 posted 2005-03-10 11:54 PM

Even if the eyes are open
the person pretends to see
he reads the headlines
pretends to know all
then at his funeral
he can pretend to be alseep.

that one might exist
in a dreamland
in their wakened state
or is this all a hoax;
is one forever asleep
that corpses might awaken?

The body in state, lies still
it's eyes remain sealed
even if eyes are open
ones fate unravels.

Even if headlines are read
one might just be niave
numb to adult pressures
pretends to sleep

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (03-11-2005 09:27 PM).]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2005-03-11 09:52 AM

So you've finally given me
an answer as to why I'm
awake more than I'm asleep.

Later is good for that.

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

2 posted 2005-03-11 09:25 PM

Right on, a feelin that being awake is being being more asleep than when you turn the light out at night...;0

froggy
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since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

3 posted 2005-04-25 03:37 PM

Enjoyed this piece very much so.

:-)

<^^> Today the pond....Tomorrow the world

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2005-04-25 06:25 PM

good to read you again Martin

God only promises a safe landing, not a calm flight.

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

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5 posted 2005-04-27 09:45 AM

Tsk -- general rule....write "high" and your replies will be low....

A few of us, folks like Martie, Greeneyes, Wranx, Suthern...can write high and get away with it, but that's because they're beloved here....but the rest of us, nope....

Which is my way of saying, gee whiz this is good!

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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2005-04-27 05:47 PM

I enjoyed this, Martin...the turn about with the closed eyes. Well done!

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

7 posted 2005-04-28 02:14 AM

Thanks for bringing this up again Ella, it's looks like I have been asleep but I've been oh so busy these past two months on film and play projects

Appreciate your feedback Martie

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