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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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She pulls her hair so thoroughly she's bald from all the yanking need I thought "chemo" when I saw beneath the cradle of a scarf like tiny bloody prints of ant she bleeds her head for stress relief and nothing nothingness competes with the crawling of her skin in the mirror magnified all her sins removed she laughs and wears a single earring hoop she calls it acts of piracy-- the punchline to the joke. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (02-14-2005 10:49 PM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh, Karen, I know of those who have done this. Your description is exact. Your understanding complete. I knew of one young lady who had no eyelashes and no eyebrows, as well. The pain they must feel -- my heart aches for them. The title of this -- wow.  & OMmmmm .......jo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
my apologies jo-jo, I HATED the last line so I edited. I'm not too happy with the new one, so any suggestions are welcome.  Thanks for reading lady.  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Actually, Karen, I think it's even better now. (apologies? What for? I liked it just fine before.) I think that the change, though, sums up the other aspect involved...the joke (the idea that somehow this is having control, at least this is my own thought on the matter). It's like other emotional diseases, I think, like anerxia and bolemia (did I spell those right)? |
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Red Dreams Member
since 2005-01-09
Posts 90massachusetts |
strong. i like this. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I've known a couple of these people, as well. Tears me apart knowing they hurt so much... and you described it perfectly, I believe. Wouldn't say I understand, because I haven't been there, but I'd say yes it's all about the joke, the control of fixing it all by one's self... Anyway, well done Ser. Quite well... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Okay. I was afraid it would be misconstrued as light-heartedness, but in the context of the understanding replies, it stays. thanks all for reading *hugs to them that know* |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Sending this back up because I think it is worth more reading. It's an important issue and goes on far more than many are aware. I'm glad you penned it, Karen. ....jo |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
very haunting and disturbing to see a person in so much turmoil; can only hope they seek some help |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I don't know why I wrote this'n, but I just tend to write whatever is yammering the walls of my head, and this time it was her. I had run into her at the corner store and she was wearing a wig--I didn't recognize her with hair. And yes, it would be nice if I could help, but um, she doesn't see it as a problem, and any discussion that goes beyond her own jokes (see? that last line actually IS more appropriate) is ended abruptly with a mind your own expletive business. So....sigh. My apologies folks. Not exactly feel-good poetry. But thanks for your consideration in reading. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
feel good poetry? lol.. I would rather the real. you always write the real like no other....love ya lady. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'm glad this came back up again... for no... it's not feel-good poetry... but I dare anyone to read and not FEEL... Powerful work, dear lady! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Trichotillomania - pulling out one's hair...we had a friend who worked with my mother who constantly did this, primarily due to stress from her family. It was always strange - she would get to her "safe zone" around my mother, and the involuntary pulling would begin. As for the "not so feel-good" poem? Anytime you write is a time to read you... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Aware with a glare. Enjoyed |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You know Karen, I had a girl in our group with this problem that went untreated since early childhood, so very sad. They start this so young and if not caught, well you described the result. For those that are interested here's a link to be aware of the childhood signs to stop it. http://www.babycenter.com/refcap/toddler/toddlerbehavior/11553.html What's past is prologue. |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
you said before that you take pleasure from tormenting me. It is only because I allow it. If it eases your pain than bring it on .I can only say better to torment me than to torment yourself, because I can take it. adagio |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Ok...I've been away for awhile But I look at the comment above and say WTF!?! anyway m'witch, its definately real time poetry. Lubs ya! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen It is the understanding heart of you (that you show in this poem) that inspires me to be a better person. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I think what Martie said says volumes... and Ser...words from you are always such that it reminds me of the old E.F. Hutton saying...when he speaks, people listen... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
"Jolly Roger smiles...." Fortunately I can't relate to this poem but it reminds me of a true story I once heard.. In college, Martin Scorcese, studying cinematic directing had, as his final test, to create a 3 minute film, on which he, along with the other students, would be graded. His film was of a man standing in front of a bathroom mirror, shaving with a straight razor. He shaved until all the stubble was gone and continued shaving. He began shaving off slivers of skin, and then larger chunks, shaving until his face was a mess of blood and cuts. The blood poured down the white porcelain basin and still he continued, expressionless. That was the end of the 3 minute film. He received the highest grade ever awarded for that test. One of the other students, upon viewing the film clip, asked what it signified and the professor replied, "Viet Nam, of course" and Scorcese smiled and nodded his head. Your poem brings that story back to mind..... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*hugging m'deer, here* And m'yeti? I too saw adagio's reply and asked the same WTF? "Do I look BALD to you?" He politely and obediently replied he'd misunderstood.  Adagio is his name-o. (laughing) Love to all.  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
'I focus on the pain the only thing that's real' -- Trent Reznor it may not be pretty but it's real |
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