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and in truth, serenity
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and in truth, serenity |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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there are moments when my mind is clear and in truth serenity then every single counted hair receives as serendipity I can feel you there my love and oh-but-you-are-beautiful let me keep me very still I feel you breathing poetry as fragile as the both of us potential of agility as deer in drink of stream. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
goodness, you gave me chills LOVED this  |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Beautiful! Especially: "I feel you breathing poetry as fragile as the both of us..." Thank you ~P |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Karen, this takes my breath away! Like I said before...."a gift." Happy Valentine's Day, Serenty. .....jo |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
How lovely! This appears to be written with such ease, but it is talent, perception, and skill that wrote this little masterpiece! To the library at once! Happy Valentine's Day, Serenity. miscellanea |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I feel you breathing poetry as fragile as the both of us potential of agility as deer in drink of stream. This is absolutely lovely K. Happy valentines day to you gal. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Beautiful, sweet SerenOne. Happy Valentine's Day Hugs,  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Lovely this... Lovely you.. Happy Valentine's Day! In the midst of winter, |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Excellent! __________ice ><> |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Your words always touch me deeply, Karen...in places I often don't wish to travel... M |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
you have painted the beautiful quietude of a serene moment while showing us a background of the flowing motion of life ... its lovely to read you regards sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I feel you breathing poetry as fragile as the both of us ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ *smiling at you* for this lovely heart light.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
beautiful and sheer bliss |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
you know, sometimes i haven't the slightest idea what your'e trying to say. but - i support your efforts to say it. a  and a  signed, satan  egowhores.com - really love yourself. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It ain't often I feel this sweet, but um, somebody melted the witch!  Thanks for reading good poets. (And Christopher does too understand me  )He'll just never admit it publically.  to all |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
as fragile as the both of us and YOU are beautiful in your melting M'lady. Mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
says you! egowhores.com - really love yourself. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...great write! Eric |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
a stunning piece of work that easily pulled your reader in to the moment.. until that last line. i'm going to have think on that one :-) which is not a bad thing. i really enjoyed this S~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
well, I missed this while I was tending to the home needs... I would quote but it would be the same lines as the rest... you are the sweetest damn witch I know.. wait..you are the only witch I know...I think. oh crap. I adore you.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen...I too am glad this came back up to read...it's beautiful! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I shall read this again and tell you Lady that this just blew my chest wide open. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
"I feel you breathing poetry!" Rf |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
How in the world did I miss this treasure the first time round?!! You're remarkable Karen. Hugs, Chrislane |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh, I'm glad this rose to the top again... yes, yes, yes... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
beautiful, simply stunning, whew...speechless |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you are lovely in your vulnerability |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"I can feel you there my love and oh-but-you-are-beautiful let me keep me very still I feel you breathing poetry as fragile as the both of us" ...sweetly gently written...beautiful |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
:: Oh, that's niice...the imagery...lovely:: much love, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
I feel you breathing poetry as fragile as the both of us Karen... I have been reading of your thoughts for 2 years and one week... and I still can't figure out how you can keep the quality of your writing as high as you always seem to do. I still refer back to that duet we did for lessons on how to do it, and I just can't seem to get it right... I absolutely (in case you missed it) loved this. In the wooden chair |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
breathing this in feels right |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You guys always seem to respond to the part of me that I am least likely to show. thanks, very much for that love to all |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Tender is your heart dear Karen. You have not fooled anyone I am afraid. I do like the vulnerability of you. Again you touch my heart. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Double Posted |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity...So where has this gentle tender side of you been hiding for so long? I listened quietly too your words and heard your heartbeat tenderly...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
loved it too |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
I can not believe you are not world famous yet. adagio |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
I can not believe you are not world famous yet. adagio |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
this seems to be yet another side of you |
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