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Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2005-03-01 11:38 PM

A slow
soft rain
wets the street outside

Water drops
bead on a spider web
A sparrow shivers
then flutters the dampness
from its wings

Summer flowers
raise and bow their heads
A gentle cadenced pattering
on silver maple leaves

A certain blue
to the dawn cool air

The sun just rising
in the East

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

1 posted 2005-03-01 11:41 PM

Just as I was leaving....thinking I'd caught all the rays there were to catch....here is another, and a perfect one to say good night on.

Thank you for making my evening, Huan Yi.... and yes, I did grab the first spot and then go back to read and actually reply!

Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

2 posted 2005-03-02 07:38 AM

Thanks RL,

It's nice to hear
my stuff isn't all that bad.

John

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2005-03-02 08:29 AM

This has such an amazing visual impact... what beautiful images! *S*

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

4 posted 2005-03-02 08:43 AM

John...this was incredible, and made me think I was watching the movie...Sense and Sensiblity...

this was enveloping...and took me to a place I remember well...thank you

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2005-03-02 08:47 AM

Huan Yi
Well done a delightful read.

Lost Dreamer
Member Elite

since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

6 posted 2005-03-02 11:31 AM

Oh, I love sunrises, your poem captures the essense beautifully

Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2005-03-02 07:28 PM

Methinks that you should be called "serenity".

You write the still moment superbly.

Drauntz
Member Elite

since 2007-03-16

Posts 2905
Los Angeles California

8 posted 2007-05-01 02:12 PM

then dream into it.

with all the beautiful scene, you titled it without. how sad!!!!!

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