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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2005-03-01 11:38 PM



A slow
soft rain
wets the street outside

Water drops
bead on a spider web
A sparrow shivers
then flutters the dampness
from its wings

Summer flowers
raise and bow their heads
A gentle cadenced pattering
on silver maple leaves

A certain blue
to the dawn cool air

The sun just rising
in the East





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1 posted 2005-03-01 11:41 PM


Just as I was leaving....thinking I'd caught all the rays there were to catch....here is another, and a perfect one to say good night on.

Thank you for making my evening, Huan Yi.... and yes, I did grab the first spot and then go back to read and actually reply!

Huan Yi
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2 posted 2005-03-02 07:38 AM



Thanks RL,

It's nice to hear
my stuff isn't all that bad.

John

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3 posted 2005-03-02 08:29 AM


This has such an amazing visual impact... what beautiful images! *S*
LeeJ
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4 posted 2005-03-02 08:43 AM


John...this was incredible, and made me think I was watching the movie...Sense and Sensiblity...

this was enveloping...and took me to a place I remember well...thank you

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
5 posted 2005-03-02 08:47 AM


Huan Yi
Well done a delightful read.

Lost Dreamer
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6 posted 2005-03-02 11:31 AM


Oh, I love sunrises, your poem captures the essense beautifully

Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent.



serenity blaze
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7 posted 2005-03-02 07:28 PM


Methinks that you should be called "serenity".

You write the still moment superbly.

Drauntz
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8 posted 2007-05-01 02:12 PM


then dream into it.

with all the beautiful scene, you  titled it without. how sad!!!!!

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