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Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

0 posted 2005-03-01 10:52 PM

she will bring you happy flowers
take with her the sky, and a
woman who’s name is Maria
with eye’s that are filled with
fog and rain
and
she will take autumn
her wide-eyed dreams that break
behind spattered lids

and there
you could look-out into them
to see a suburb, a house
perhaps some trees or daisies
even balconies that hold her
with sea-music in blue

and perhaps one into another
you’d clutch the hem of skirts
bite the mouth of night

to undo the distances
in rainy moments.

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (03-02-2005 02:41 PM).]

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2005-03-01 10:58 PM

goosebumps

How do you do this?

Like looking at the world prismed in a drop of rain...

you amaze me

you do

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2005-03-01 11:26 PM

even balconies that hold her
with sea-music in blue

That reads so nice to me. I saw a card today with a gold fish batting his eyes from the inside of his fish bowl, with an ocean view outside the window. The sentiment read, enjoy your new view. Reminds me that life's rewards are not always tangible ones. Anyway, I liked your poem a lot, Maree~

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2005-03-01 11:31 PM

Maree

You do undo distance with the way you see.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2005-03-02 12:24 PM

you always blow me away!

"with eye’s that are filled with
fog and rain
and
she will take autumn
her wide-eyed dreams that break
behind spattered lids"

awesome

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2005-03-02 12:43 PM

yes, I sure would:

clutch the hem of skirts
bite the mouth of night

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

6 posted 2005-03-02 01:42 AM

A great read, DA! Thanks.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

7 posted 2005-03-03 06:11 AM

M'lady, goosebumps eh? I believe there is a certains scarf that may come in handy hmm? you know what to do

You're too kind m'love.

Ms Blues, yanno I have seen that card too. Thank you for popping by *smile*

Dear Martie, I love you.. you know that right?

Ms Susan, am glad to know I blow you away. Your replies blow ME away
Mxx

Hey there Sue, I thank you kindly.

HoneyBumch, glad yuo enjoyed...thank you.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

8 posted 2005-03-15 05:09 PM

wow Maree, you truly do undo distance when you write....
you make the reader feel they are right there with you.

Well done gal....well done indeed....

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2005-03-18 09:54 PM

awesome!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

10 posted 2005-03-18 09:59 PM

Gads, Maree...you are undoing strings here...violins and guitars are naked in their vibrant sing of this wonderful song!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2005-03-19 02:36 AM

Perhaps...James

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