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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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no longer there a distant memory hidden fast a distant past absent from the now removed from the earth laid fallow by nature's plow I'd recollect childlike thoughts as I went to school as I played the fool no longer there in my heart I see a fatherly image dime a day generosity meager funds kept alive to sow the fields laid fallow recollected thoughts hallowed as I watered a summer lawn and learned life as a pawn absent from the now framed for present view an ever distant past flag at half mast I'd continue in his name to play the fool of life's uncertain game |
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Not all memories are sweet...I'm sorry that yours aren't!  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
......jo |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
no need to apologize, it's so long ago ...some memories are dear, but life sometimes short changes us..and then we move on  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
indeed, you are so right Martin enjoyed the read here |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
 HUGS, Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." A. Brink |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Martin I like the way this poem is written, the form matches the subject perfectly, sort of a stammer, that matches the story line... I think your reply to Marties comment also adds to the story line... " life sometimes short changes us..and then we move on" A very good line to begin another stanza, or another poem... ------------ice ><> |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
yes, what Ford and all the others said above, this was so compelling, it pulled me a long and left me thinking about how life would be, if we could just forget about the bad stuff, chalk it up to learning experiences which better us....and then, I begin to realize...that we've got to move on, and become....more? Hugs to you sweet man |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
thanks ice and Lee for your valuable feedback..life has to move on. |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Hey Martin, I agree with all the others on this piece. :-) <^^> Today the pond....Tomorrow the world |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
This is so sad. -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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