Open Poetry #35 |
Chained to his mood |
Martie
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Posts 28049California |
Chained to His Mood The taste of it in the air sometimes despair and on sunny Sundays a ride in the car car going for a ride in the car to the beach with bare feet Freckles his arms told this hold of sun but more the score he wept on weekdays with stone eyes that hurt me but Sunday was my window seat and the telephone pole watch of drowsy where the drain is open and the careful watch loosened Oh it felt so good to not have to be careful for almost a whole day The muted conversation background music to the sweet slipping away to dream and then the sand caught me in my beginning and in its end to distribute time in a picnic basket with peanut butter and jelly and warm milk from a thermos Run me to the waves daddy let me ride again on the shoulders of your love your Sunday love |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Jesus Martie . . . you always snag me by my collar (and pantleg) and whip me back to my childhood . . . (thank you) |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"Oh it felt so good to not have to be careful for almost a whole day" Wow! I don't remember a day like that. I think I may need one of those...but then who would sleep, listening, with one eye open? |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I know this |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I love it when you make the tears come easy... with a smile... of remember. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
lovely write here don't we all remember riding on dad's shoulders? |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Thank you for sharing your memory with me.... Very nice!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." A. Brink |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I don't remember...not one time....my father picking me up. My memories go back all the way to nursing and being unable to turn over -- and I don't remember a single time. I do remember those once-or-twice-a-summer days at Excelsior Springs, and they were glorious! You've done it again, Martie -- turned on the memory flood....but I wish I had that one to recall. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Run me to the waves daddy let me ride again on the shoulders of your love your Sunday love" Just plain "wow," Martie. What a vivid picture...and the mood, yes, you certainly captured a mood! ....jo |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You write so vividly that even those of us who do not know this can feel it through your memories... Excellent! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jeez Martie, thank you for taking me back to my own childhood with this....simply beautiful memories. As always a masterful write from you dear. mxx "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
so wonderfully done Martie - you paint pictures and feelings for everyone with your wonderful words - this is just terrrific - Paul |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling wide... I remember too. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Run me to the waves daddy let me ride again on the shoulders of your love your Sunday love" There are certain ones you write that make the swell of tears spill over.. this is one such write. Heart hugs sweet Martie. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
as always m'friend.. you amaze me... |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Beautiful, Martie. Thank you for taking my mind back to when life was simple. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Yes,as had been said, this carries us back to childhood. It is always a joy to read you, Martie. Hugs, Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yes, this brings to each of us our own thoughts of a time and place, thanx for the share! |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I like this alot |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Martie, you took me there in every way! Thank you for sharing this jewel, and for all the warm smiles you bring! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A joy to read....James |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
hmmmm, never had a daddy to pick me up...but then, you never miss what you don't know...but enjoyed reliving this most precious memory, through your words....hugs you...hope all is going well with you and yours. Luv Me |
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