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soaking up the sun (inspired by dixie's the rains come)
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soaking up the sun (inspired by dixie's the rains come) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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The thunder rolled before the rain a carpet red before a throne and lightning made the dark of day as bright as all the yesterdays of all my sins atoned, I said: "Save me from my clover dreams. Take me to a daisy chain and rivers run a channel deep as bees are bumble bass refrain underneath a buttercup leaving yellow on the chin tickles till you scream 'enough' and sprouts are wicked, wicked grin" Just before the clouds roll in teasing our barefeet in fly... and thunderdrums are African as mud becomes the red earth fried sticking to our feet we run, dotting daisy-eyed, the sky stiffening our skirts in sun as we lay ourselves to dry in the thunder before rain laughing in collapse, we tried-- soaking up the sun.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
""Save me from my clover dreams. Take me to a daisy chain and rivers run a channel deep as bees are bumble bass refrain underneath a buttercup leaving yellow on the chin tickles till you scream 'enough' and sprouts are wicked, wicked grin"" Smilin' at this Ser. Excellent inspired write. Love ya lady~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yin for Yang... a good pull in this, serenity! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
OMG! I got chills! wow lady! you can really do it good! mmmm, methinks me likes to inspire! to think my rambling on a boring rainy night could inspire such a work here... definite keeper, yeah *click* into the library..and into my heart  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oooops....in my heart, but forgot the button for the darn library |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen You write magic!  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
God, how this reminded me of splashing in the creek when I was little . . . thank you Karen. (and Dix) |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
and thunderdrums are African as mud becomes the red earth fried sticking to our feet we run, dotting daisy-eyed, the sky stiffening our skirts in sun as we lay ourselves to dry Not only did I get this one, I adored it. The images of girls playing in the rain, then sprawling out on the grass to dry in the sun is a picture I will be in one day down there, yes I will! Oh, and I loved those lines up there too. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Simply enchanting m'lady mxx "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
had to come back to visit this again |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
the images made me smile Karen. Nicely done. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"The thunder rolled before the rain a carpet red before a throne and lightning made the dark of day as bright as all the yesterdays of all my sins atoned...." Great poetic craft!!! |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Your talent poureth forth. This is a fantastic piece, Karen. Thank you for sharing. ((((Hugs)))), Rae |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thanks all for reading, and especially to Dix, for leading me to one of the happiest reveries I've had in awhile. Yer all so lovely. *curtsey* thanks again |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Karen, This one really takes me there! Loved it! adagio |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Some poems -- ya just read 'em, and sit there wishing you'd written 'em yourself.....love the balance in this, and the sense of inevitability as it moves. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I read this earlier today... and love it even more as I visit again... Wonderful write! *S* |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
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