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The Request
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The Request |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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The Request I need you to come, not on the 27th, but on August 20th, we moved the wedding up one week… I need you to be there. I need you to take the photos! Circled in and runeing out from this hold, old bit of dampish gray BAM the hit of home runs home, fifty-five years ago, that day… and still a dream in someone’s eye, still a hold in play, somewhere in mine own cellar of disorder, tombs float, yet there I’ll be, that day… as black and white those images and less was more back then, a daughter’s love transferred to man, and images of when all stood straight and tall and proud victorious some would say, the mother and the father smiled as they gave their daughter away, but it was only pictured “show” and none were there to tell, how it feels when losing one how it feels like hell. Yes, I will be there for this child whose mama is one good friend… for I was there for mama, yes, and photo’d her new begin… now daughter wants me there as well, to pictorialize….but what is hurting me right now, are facts I can’t disguise, so when wedding bells are pealing and images occur, In the cellar of disorder, [where] the tombs [of love] [might] float, I’ll hear your voices, sure. ~*~ Had they lived a bit longer, some days or so more, August 20, 2005, would have been my parents own 55th wedding anniversary. To those that understand the need to remember, thank you. © Karilea Rilling Jungel June 15, 2005 http://www.webcom.com/wordings/artofwrite/poetrygenerator.html [Always go with the FIRST “create”] [This message has been edited by Sunshine (06-16-2005 06:33 PM).] |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
she's lucky to have had a momma who had you for a friend!   |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
***standing ovation*** this wrecked me....truly stunning spill of words and emotion~~~ wow... **baby **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Lovely this ... lovely you. hugs, Chrislane Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Karilea~ bonded always, this is priceless! I keep a fragrance bottle my |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
How very touching! Though great happiness is felt for the present, there's a solomn memory. You've put it together so nicely. Rae |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a very touching piece, indeed |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I do understand. What a touching poem, sweet SIL.  ....jo[This message has been edited by iliana (06-17-2005 12:39 AM).] |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
The tenderness of your words bring tears to the heart...Stunning write...*big hugs* |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I'm always overwhelmed when I hear of such long "times together"! And your very beautiful write confirms this, I am deeply touched. Love, Margherita |
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The One & Only Member
since 2005-01-26
Posts 58Kansas USA |
Mom I miss them too! More then anyone would ever know!! Just pass them down to yours! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
"To those that understand the need to remember, thank you." I do understand, but I thank you! |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
In the cellar of disorder, [where] the tombs [of love] [might] float, ------------------ This caught my eye, and my heart. This poem has something one can feel. Thank you. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I like this poem. It is set up very differently. Nice and refreshing (; -Juju Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
in memory there is great wealth...delivering, that the gains from loss sometimes, are valued within only who we are... this gave me chills...and is one of my favs of yours...terrific write m'lady poetess...one hellofa write.... Love you... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
beleive it or not? this took me places i've never been. strange? yes.. they tell me all the time *smile* hugs and luv you Kari mxx "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
 "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
The words flow out perfectly, Karilea! Another thing we have in common! Can you believe that my parents' anniversary would have been that same day! Enjoyed your poem very much! cathy |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Soft words....James |
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