Open Poetry #35 |
Hearing Grace In Skirted Wind (1:10 from Rain) |
Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
She rose with grace And the flow of her skirt whipped By the wind she drew in breath Swirled around the outlines of form In patterns that moved across the sky To the milk of her skin Clung the rain inside to leave the illusion Of dense grey to match the fey way She whispered even far away To the restless leaves of oak and birch As they turned to greet her coming Wet they dreamed of rain And I tried my eyes closed again To remember how the days were set to waste When there was not enough of her To seep deep to the roots And to trickle across the face of stone With its tired eyes unable to see but shadows As it lay the buried half in and out alone I would sleep inside the space She left between her pour And the roar inside as it sounded back again An echo more An echo less to match the sounds of wind When she begins But I find only the numbered steps Six to the left then six turned to face myself In a flash against the panes Reflecting both her stormy countenance Of split second shards And the glyph of drops spelling out the words My own tongue can not speak One more storm she comes As I find the tread worn 4 wide to match the 6 in a walnut confine and wish again for sleep to come that I might find comfort come dreams or the sin of bared flesh shared sings her wind again and I am blind waiting for the thunder to begin |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I would sleep inside the space She left between her pour And the roar inside as it sounded back again An echo more An echo less to match the sounds of wind and wish again for sleep to come that I might find comfort come dreams or the sin of bared flesh shared sings her wind again and I am blind waiting for the thunder to begin I keep a fragrance bottle my muse gave me when I met him in endless winter and he settled me into remembering who I am. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Wow! brava sir....brava..... I really want to care, |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
I like this Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
A stunningly poetic vision that reflects the power your pen has with its weaving...Magnificent...I completely enjoy the vision that changes with each reading...*hugs* |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I like the multiple internal rhymes in this. And the images. Lovely images. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I would sleep inside the space She left between her pour And the roar inside as it sounded back again An echo more An echo less to match the sounds of wind When she begins ~*~ Once again, Cap'n, you caught her. Elusive as her light is, as thunderous as her heart may be, you caught her well...only to let her go along her way... However, no matter how unworthy any future offerings I might give may be, I will continue to strive toward THIS kind of magnificence! Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close...and keep my promises... |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
oh hell yes........ **baby **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
sounds as if you have met Mother Earth herself . . . |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
You should share more... beautifully written. ~tier |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
bernie enjoyed A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
:: swooping in for seconds, thirds, eightieths ::: lol love you, fierce, **babyblu **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Damn boy! You musta been thinkin' again. or liftin' the moss offa rocks. VERY nice m'friend |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
well, life around here got a little hectic and I lost track of these... so, now I am catching up a bit This was a gift to find this evening as I begin to dig through what I have missed the pass few days. very touching Tima |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
But I find only the numbered steps Six to the left then six turned to face myself In a flash against the panes Reflecting both her stormy countenance Of split second shards And the glyph of drops spelling out the words My own tongue can not speak you are a mystic poet, to say the least...exceptional writing, bringing to life, a picture in the readers mind....wonderful done and enjoyed emmensly |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
has to be with the rest I just read . . . |
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