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Our Solemn Dream |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City 
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So, the amber tears go burning, over our earth in the bloodpath of a Sabbath kiss, evening sells itself to the sphinx moth's length of tongue, come upon the earthsong, undone in acres of dream and drink the calyx of heavy red flowers, slaughtered on the cocksure splinters of this jezebel night, red red jezebel night wed to the jagged panes of glass, whose forsaken shards I've sown into my palm in couplets and sealed with candlewax, for love burns its amber wick dipped in sloe gin, and sore these shoulders grow so raw, now for want of their great black wings, ache in the early morning blush, and wait for him to husband the serenade of amber tears, so relinquished to this, our solemn dream. 2005 copyright babygirLPress **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BG~ You grabbed me with 'amber tears' and held me for a totally captivating read~ Thank you for sharing this~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Marge~ thank you for such a warm reply...so glad you enjoyed this... love&light, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I always, always enjoy the hues and textures you leave on paper (even the "virtual" kind) |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Baby Girl...Strong write. Enjoyed...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Mari, damn you know I will forever adore these lines: these shoulders grow so raw, now for want of their great black wings, reminds me of Morrison in "American Prayer" You amaze me, always and I want the dictionary in your head, please. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
wranx...a "virtual" kiss on the cheek...you are a doll...thank you... ***************** Paul~so glad you enjoyed this....thanks... ***************** littlewing~ (((thank you))) love&light, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"the calyx of heavy red flowers, slaughtered on the cocksure splinters of this jezebel night, red red jezebel night wed to the jagged panes of glass, whose forsaken shards I've sown into my palm in couplets" I always read... and this one really pulled me in. The quoted stanza, my favorite. The use of the word "slaughtered" was so perfect there...so grabbing. Well done.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
always a pleasure to read you..and this one..is one of my favorites from you... |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Susan C~ thanks so much for your eyes here~ love&light, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
thank you my Chief...good to see you on these blue pages as well... love&fire, **baby** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile you got ME with the reference of the sphinx moth (I must plant some four o clocks...) and hugs any friend of theirs is a friend of mine |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Know what I enjoy most about your poetry? Everyone reads it differently and absorbs it how they wish to see it, (as it should be.) I loved this reference myself! for love burns its amber wick dipped in sloe gin Definitely a favorite one of yours. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
BG, your poetry leaves one breathless. Always a mind blowing experience to read your works. truly outstanding! ~tier |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
and sealed with candlewax, for love burns its amber wick dipped in sloe gin, and sore these shoulders grow so raw, now for want of their great black wings, ache some may read this, and feel saddness, but here, I feel a great understanding...not sad at all, but of more an accomplishment...excellent prose in the early morning blush, and wait for him to husband the serenade of amber tears, so relinquished to this, our solemn dream. I hope he does, and know, so do you, but if he doesn't I to know, you'll understand...you possess great knowledge of what can be and what cannot be...your a very mature woman...allowing and intellectual... BRAVO!!!!! |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Serenity ((thank you, love))~~~ and Mysteria....((thank you for always being there for me))... love&light, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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