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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
No One Is Around Don’t ask questions of the boy’s mother, she will only prove the thickness of blood, and guts, providing homilies of open ears and a loosely empty brain letting things slide through as it were… no, don’t ask questions of the boy’s mother. But listen when she talks, when no one is around and you will hear of days of regret when picking berries, stomping on more than a few; of rounding geese and wringing necks; and every Sunday chicken’s feathers were plucked cleanly, with a vengeance. Then you won’t wonder why carpets were beaten so austerely, bed sheets that could bounce quarters, windows that were squeaked clean, when dour became her smile. “He didn’t fall so far,” the hoped-for smile of grateful is still a dream, as even weathered dull blue eyes take in more than she wants to see, as she’s reflected now in your face. There is no convenience in modern day gadgets, and even iron skillets are thought of only as a chicken’s final resting place. We have no where to lay our frustration for dad’s only living son. Not in this world. Give me a chicken, please, I’ll make supper. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow...this one hurts to read..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ouch...agreeing with Ed, Deca...you brought the feelings and the scenes into view so clearly...the mark of a good writer, of course.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"But listen when she talks, when no one is around" Deca, you have sensitive ears, and hear even the quiet heartbeats. Good to read you again. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Awesome writing Dear Deca. Hugs, Chris  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
hmmmm ms deca I enjoy what you have between your lines |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
wow....this is superb, deep...and painful.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Many strong statements Veiling tortured days and nights Longing for release Well told but sad story. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You certainly can tell a story ~ be it true or otherwise. Deca, you can reeaally write!!! You stirred up all kinds of memories for me ~ nostalgic ones from this lifetime and some from another! Literally gut=wrenching at points. Brava, Deca! Very well-written piece of poetry. Love, Light & the Eternal Flame, EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (02-24-2005 11:36 PM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
astounding write and read...and totally in agreement with those above me....wonderfully executed |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Such a powerful poem... with an ending that goes straight to the heart. Wonderful work!! |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
wow! you have breathed so much life into a snapshot of time. so strong, i can smell, touch, taste and hear. i've read and reread a half dozen times, and it moves . . . has a sadness that sticks to you. I haven't read much of your poetry . . . will be looking for more! Rf |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
All of the above. Too much hurt, very revealing, sad. best, marty |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Deca, Wow. This is timely. My son volunteered to "put down" his first chicken last week. It had a bad leg and could hardly walk. He thought it would be easy, but found that it was not! There are many pleasures in life on a farm, but can be many frustrations as well. I really enjoyed reading this, although of its nature, it is sad. ~miscellanea |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I was thinking exactly what Martie said as I was reading this. I could see it all and feel it all, sad yes...but magnificently told. a  Maree  and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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