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the river has disappeared
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the river has disappeared |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{From my Journals of Endless Winter; Mixtures of Thought Different Pages} ~~**~~ The river has disappeared beyond the bend my paint brush was wet with anticipation but how do I paint the taste of rain and orchids (or) the bold of your back in-fingertip softness I speckle the paper with color one then another start with the sunrise, orange against blue start with sunset, purple against gold ~ ~ In my memories we are always October's hues a cathedral in the ruined city, the perfect sky of arch and ash light lost in the horizon I am alone with this silent water I am still & all-stillness pressed against stone; all grey stretched over river the skin, the drop of water near the edge it is still daytime: and I search for lines in dead grass a path to you until I can hold the sky in my hands ~~**~~ I keep a fragrance bottle my muse gave me when I met him in endless winter and he settled me into remembering who I am. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh Lauren, I started to copy lines and it got WAY out of control. (Will leave that to Jan  okay?) You dear lady are truly a treat for sore eyes, and make time spent on the internet a worthwhile thing. Gorgeous! |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Bravisimo! Que hermosa! I loved your poem, indeed. I saw the portrait of eternal love right before my eyes with this one. Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A favorite poet of mine once asked "how do hold a bird in the palm of your hand?" The answer was "become the sky." (I prolly got that wrong, but your last line reminded me of that.) grace as always |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Serinity, I think you said it well and the poem...well, Lauren, I found this most intriguing. All of the colors and how they became something so real and sensitive. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
another awesome write and I LOVE that ending |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
You paint with a magical brush! Enjoyed this canvas! glider |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
but how do I paint the taste of rain and orchids (or) the bold of your back in-fingertip softness ~ ~ In my memories we are always October's hues a cathedral in the ruined city, the perfect sky of arch and ash light lost in the horizon I am alone with this silent water I am still & all-stillness pressed against stone; all grey stretched over river the skin, the drop of water near the edge it is still daytime: and I search for lines in dead grass a path to you until I can hold the sky in my hands ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ me thinks you alredy know how to hold the sky dear poetess... all you need do is pick up that amazing gifted pen of yours... so many lines in this made me sigh and say IWIHWT. Beautiful expression L-girlie.  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lady...it goes without saying.. and you know I feel this with you... gawd gal....  sis...  I really want to care, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes... I think serenity displayed it best... humbly nodding with the others, m'dear... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lauren, I behold your talent in a state of wonder! I loved and appreciated every glorious line! ~ that is why it is being given a home in my trove of poetic treasures! Love & Light, Linda  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Absolutely exquisite! Love ya lady~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
deeply moved by the wonder of your words, this was awesome Lauren...thank you for writing and sharing. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Lauren, m'dear: you have just created that which you doubt in your very first stanzas. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
my paint brush was wet with anticipation but how do I paint the taste of rain and orchids (or) the bold of your back in-fingertip softness mmm.. a marvelous write..and above.. my favorite lines... brava ma'am.. brava |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
thank you for reading .... I appreciate the replies ......hugssss and love to all I keep a fragrance bottle my |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: ohh .... I'm here in silent appreciation of your art, dear Lauren. Love, Margherita |
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