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Engaging the Sea
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Engaging the Sea |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ You were waves lapping at my feet the beaded strand in the star light. You were the sun and moon engaging the sea, slipping away on the horizon. Casting nets from all sides, you were the buoy that kept me afloat and I knew no other way than to hold you close. Until time took it's toll, over time. So I went about untangling the ties and sordid lines, washing away my resolve into nothingness through the course of forty knots and fickle winds blowing in all directions. It is those turn of events that go unnoticed. Those weights and measures that sink to the bottom, buried beneath blue ocean's of hope dragging my heart down. Sifting through scattered sand slows the shifting that settles the drifting, distancing the shore and the idle pull to be near you. Carried away, like hidden jewels that preen polished and set smooth teemed with the elements become worn and weathered from the rise and fall. Lulled by rippled remains left in the wake and the warmest rain during a summer storm when all that glittered, shimmers silver and gold. ~*~ |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Sifting through scattered sand slows the shifting that settles the drifting, distancing the shore and the idle pull to be near you." very very much enjoyed this  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A wonderful piece Bluesy gal! Very much enjoyed the read. Hugs~Nancy ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Much to read there on the lines and between the lines. Your word associations bring up a lot in this. Well done. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you very much for reading SEA, Nancy, and Canuckster. I like to think that all things good and true don't ever lose their luster, completely. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
 Bluesy, this brought me to a place of healing, knowing the hard knocks are unkind, and yet, always remembering, out of everything bad, comes some good, if only understanding, forgiveness...the ocean is such an inspiration...teacher...that's why we beach goers love her so much...it's the places she takes us to, spiritually. Hugs for this bittersweet beautiful write...loved this a lot!!! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It is those turn of events that go unnoticed. Those weights and measures that sink to the bottom, buried beneath blue ocean's of hope dragging my heart down. This is excellent... I always know I'm in for a treat when I read your work... I may end up laughing, I may end up wiping tears... but I'm always, always touched. *S* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
touching piece |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Dear Bluesy - thank you for a wonderful read. "It is those turn of events that go unnoticed. Those weights and measures that sink to the bottom, buried beneath blue ocean's of hope dragging my heart down." Exactly right! I've made a pact to "get even" with that turner of events but I've a feeling that I'll be standing in line for a long time. Thank you for your gracious reply to me below and now I'm thinking that the sea has a lot to answer for too. Be well. |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Very much loved this one! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
just ~smiling~ because that is what you do for me hugs and love M |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You're all so good to me and I thank you. To say I'm an emotional sort is an understatement, just know your sweet replies mean a great deal to me. Thank you again, everyone. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori....You are sea worthy!!  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Bluesy, First, let me thank you for your sweet response on my post today. I wanted to e-mail you a special thank you, but I saw no e-mail icon. I enjoyed your poem a lot. The things we do to remain buoyant! I believe you have a passion for the ocean. The analogies you use seem to come so naturally for you. Very much enjoyed. cathy |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Well done Bluesy girl. beautiful description of these feelings. TD |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I don't think there is anyone that can use the sea metaphorically as well as you do. You squeeze every emotion out until we are indeed dry. Lovely. ~* C'est la vie *~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
funny thing what the sea does to us in our thoughts and i see the wind here enjoyed you ms bluezzzy |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Fantastic..the words are so fluid and read so well...but each are important to the overall piece..thank you.. Goldenrose. Desire for nothing except desirelessness,hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes, want nothing and you will have everything.avatar Meher Baba. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Until time took it's toll, over time. So I went about untangling the ties and sordid lines, washing away my resolve into nothingness through the course of forty knots and fickle winds blowing in all directions. ~*~ This brought back both poignant and yes, terrible memories...of trying to keep something afloat, when the raft had already been beached, its ties unraveled... A beautiful piece of work, Lori. Thank you. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Carried away, like hidden jewels that preen polished and set smooth teemed with the elements become worn and weathered from the rise and fall. ********************************************* something IS always there, when you let it artistry in your words, the sea painted in the mulitple shades of your blue lovely ...... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Read this yesterday but got called away before I could respond... Just wanted you to know that I loved it. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
If you could see me smiling now! You all make me so happy! Thank you, thank you. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Hey, Bluesy! This sure was engaging the sea.... in so many ways. Excellent write, and I much enjoyed your eloquent blues song. ....jo |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
simply beautiful |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you both for reading, and letting me know you were here. I'm so glad you enjoyed what wrote. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori, ========================== Lulled by rippled remains left in the wake and the warmest rain during a summer storm when all that glittered, shimmers silver and gold. ========================== Memories and tears...oddly comforting at times. I like your tender heart ya' know. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you again for leaving your comforting reply, Larry~ I can only hope that I am thought of in the same light after the storms have passed. |
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