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~K~
Member
since 2004-07-27
Posts 148


0 posted 2005-05-31 07:00 AM



you
are too kind
as usual
you plunge
the knife with
so little enthusiasm
as I blunder into
your delusions
I see my sickness
through your eyes
I see that
I am the stain
the inconvenience
the fate of every
disenchanted traveler
I am the rusted hinges
on the gift unopened
cast off & unwanted
synaptic pathways
severed
and rerouted
I wonder
who is
the dreamer

© Copyright 2005 ~K~ - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

1 posted 2005-05-31 07:34 AM


compelling

well done!

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
2 posted 2005-05-31 09:46 AM


this one ripped me open, excellent, as always
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
3 posted 2005-06-09 09:51 AM


I think this
belongs back at the top...

Good work here, ~K~

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
4 posted 2005-06-09 10:03 AM


totally gripping words.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Tiersdin
Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364
east coast
5 posted 2005-06-09 10:56 AM


I do like your style of writing.


~tier

CastleGuard
Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760
Alberta, Canada
6 posted 2005-06-09 11:02 AM


Delivers surgical cuts...without anaesthetic.

Well done.

CG

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