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inner sanctuary (repost)
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inner sanctuary (repost) |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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I stare up from My coffee cup Only to find you avoiding me I stare straight Into the void Between waking dreams And nightmares I burn my tongue As you put down the sunday paper I quickly focus my energy on the scrambled eggs at the end of my fork I feel your thoughts weighing me down And your eyes crawling over my skin I feel you taking a sip Of the bitter coffee I hope it burns a hole Through your very existence Sometimes I wish you could Read my lips You claimed a thousand times before You could But I laugh When this sugar tastes better Than your kisses ever did If only you knew That this is going to be Your last cup of morning coffee With me sitting here being seen and not heard And the last taste of my salty cries In the middle of the night And the last time I'll ever let you enter my inner sanctuary If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is a powerful write, glad you reposed this!  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You described this awkward atmosphere so powerfully. An inner sanctuary can only be entered with the secret key of love. When this key is missing, doors remain shut. Great psychologically significant write. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I know that this is a repost, but I'm hoping that what you experienced back then, does not apply to your life now. You vividly portrayed a heart-rendering scenario that is sadly true of many relationships once the blossom is off the rose. Your poetry always touches ... Loving hugs, Linda |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Good for you m'friend. There is power in the knowing the knowing, of when the cup that you drink from is dry Great write Tima |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
*understanding this*  thanks for reposting |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
she lives, and posts! stayin awhile? |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
fANTASTIC...wonderful writing of someone that is yearning for some recognition from one that is emotionally unavailable...I know this torture...also know another that endured it for many years...James |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
i hope your conviction brought you through that strange and awkward breakfast and right through the front door... the calm nature of your words reflects your intensity and belies the rage that stirs within, so repressed. mmmm.... that's good poetry. we are what we seek |
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