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youcan'tseeme
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0 posted 2005-05-27 12:56 PM




The mirror that hangs
at a slightly tiltled angle
frames a sillohette of you.
You are pasted upon the wall
opposite I
and your shady eyes stare directly
into mine.
I face forward and cock my head
a little to the left
to fully view your full self
sitting opposite of me.
And when I release my eyes from
this farsighted strain
and allow my mind to wander
aimlessly out of itself
and back into the world
i'm living in
and the chair
i'm sitting in,
i gently turn my head to the right
and notice
you're still right beside me.

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timothysangel1973
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1 posted 2005-05-27 01:37 AM


Great write !!
passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2005-05-27 06:12 AM


nice one
Honeybunch
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3 posted 2005-05-27 06:42 AM


A wonderful write.  Love though far is always right next to one and that's just one of the amazing things about love.  There are many more.
  

1slick_lady
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4 posted 2005-05-27 08:40 AM


sad
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2005-05-27 09:09 AM



Your title drew me in ... in the remember of time it seems that we can recapture a moment of tender significance~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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ThisDiamond
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6 posted 2005-05-27 11:41 PM


So very clear and refreshing.
Thoroughly enjoyed.
TD

Margherita
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7 posted 2005-05-28 10:57 AM


Sometimes we need to wander and come back to see more clearly.

A captivating write!

Love, Margherita

kaile
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8 posted 2005-06-05 01:25 PM


quote:
I face forward and cock my head
a little to the left
to fully view your full self


these lines gave me a chuckle. love what you did in order to obtain a better love. unconventional!

yv
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9 posted 2005-06-05 04:32 PM


Wow.  That was beautiful.  I truly loved this poem.  Welcome to Passions (I realize I am a little late to the welcome party, but I have had myself a little hiatus from Passions with all the insanity in my world at the moment).  Can't wait to read more from you.

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

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