Open Poetry #35 |
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Understanding Free Verse |
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Balladeer
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He placed the page in front of me. 'Read it" he said. The sentences were in the form of geometrical shapes. I read up one side of the square across the top, down the other side across the bottom up the triangle down the triangle around the circle trying to piece the words together. The sentences curled up the spirals disappearing at the turns to reappear with words missing. I lifted the page. The words slid down the paper to land in a heap at the bottom. I held the page out giving it the forty-niner shake trying to get the words back in place no gold. 'Never mind', he said. 'You just don't get it." I looked again. The words had become worms leaving slimy tracks as they made their way over the blank white surface and I knew he was right. |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Bless your ever-lovin' heart! You give it a go... and glow! Thank you for at least TRYING! |
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Larry C![]()
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Posts 10286United States |
And even I can recognize the sarcasm! Cool... I so agree. ![]() If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
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Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well done 'Deer!!! Hugs~N. ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Martie
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Michael? hmmm, grumble....maybe it's not so important to understand it. Cute the way you wrote this...made me smile! ![]() |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
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Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sarcasm laced with a touch of ingenuity and sheer frustation....me thinks!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
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enjoyed this |
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Balladeer
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Sunshine..thanks for the encouragement but my 'go' doesn't go very far! Larry...sarcasm? Moi?? No way! ![]() Enchantress.. ![]() Martie..this doesn't apply to your work, which I am in complete envy of! Magnus...LOL! That about sums it up! ![]() Thank you, Dixie... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Well, whatever position you be in, Dear Balls of Deer, I can read you like a book! ~ and you're a real page turner! Loveya, funny man! EA |
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Balladeer
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Thank you, Angel...wanna see my appendix? ![]() |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
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Mike, with a huge smile spreading across my face, I have to tell you ~~ I admire a brain with a sense of humor all wrapped up in a great sense of humility. You are something else! martyjo |
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timothysangel1973![]()
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Posts 1725Never close enough |
I loved this. I write in free verse and don't even understand what I write myself most of the time hehe You win my vote just for trying. Gotta love the poem that don't rhyme I always say. It makes you use your imagination. Tima |
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Local Parasite![]()
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Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Why worms? Because they have no feet? Did I win the prize? Iamb confused. ![]() |
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Kit McCallum
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Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Michael, you can write in ANY style and still manage to make me smile with admiration. This was great. I'll bet you had a hard time "not" sneeking in a rhyme here or there though, lol. ![]() Always wonderful to read you, my 'Deer. Great job on this, loved the visuals! ![]() Best wishes and hugs, /Kit (PS ... ROFL @ Local Parasite's reply!) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
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Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer What did you say? LOL See you when I get back. |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ You *tickle* me ... and I love it~ Catch you in real-rhyme time~ ![]() *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
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m'friend you can write anything and it will be perfect! Enjoyed this side of you. I really want to care, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
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Hardy har har! Your "appendix"! I liked that "foot" note! ![]() At times you are a bit "forward" ~ but I like that in a bookworm! |
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Balladeer
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Late Arrival....thank you! I like putting a smile on your face...) Tima...certainly DOES spur on the imagination! Thanks for the sweet encouragement! Local Parasite....ROFL!! You are a real villain, L. Parasite!! ![]() Kit..Hey, I don't rhyme all the time. How can you say I write that way? Golly, gee - you misjudge me!!! ![]() Sy...until then, Sy. Have a great time!! Marge...you got it! See you there.... Gentle Spirit...thanks for being on my "side". Earth Angel...forward? Me? NEVER!! (see you between the covers) |
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