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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Are you going to die? Is death the thief poised to steal my breath the instant it takes yours? I’ve a lump in my throat and my heart is sore I’m so filled with dread I can’t take much more From my depths I cry please give me relief and whisper “all’s well”... even if you have to lie |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You sure know how to convey your sense of foreboding. It was palpable! I could really feel it. Whoever was the focus of this poem, I send them healing love ~ and keep some for yourself as well, my friend. You sound as though you need some emotional healing. God bless you both, EA |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
"even if you have to lie" Wow very good sometimes the lie can comfort even if you know it's a lie ,when the teller wishes it were true. adagio |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Oh do I ever know this feeling~~oh yes! Not long ago I had a friend drop out, go silent on me, and you'd be amazed if I told you all the things I thought up to explain it! When things got straight again it was a huge relief, but not nearly enough to make up for all the angst. I hope you at least get that much out of this! There you go again, writing so well that I forget the poem itself, and center on the message it brings. That's the mark of true quality, you know, to write in a way that is completely transparent to the reader -- and you have. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Perhaps a petit mort will help you recover? Moi? ut oh Nice writing, Ruth - here's a hug |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
suthern, It's as if you have scraped out fear workings of my inner mind. You sure have a way of doing this! Wishing you a faster peace, but sooner or later, it'll come. Until then, just know that you aren't alone. I really like how you get down to the core. hugs, miscee |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth I suspect this is a common feeling, I know I have felt it; but you do manage to capture it in a masterful way, with all the emotion within. Wishing you peace.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
understanding this  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I remember that time... yet I knew truth would even overcome the lie sooner than I would ever care to admit, so I grasped the truth of it all, and dealt with it all differently than had I accepted the lie. I am sure, Ruth, that this is opening windows of wisdom and introspection in vast and varying ways for all of your readers... and that is exactly what excellent poetry is all about. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthernGal~ 'Is death the thief poised to steal my breath the instant it takes yours?' Oh ... this reaches down deeply ...~ Is it any wonder I think of you at times you're 'vibing' ?  Be well ... be loved ...~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my...this does touch me deeply. I know this feeling well. Heart hugs to you dear lady~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Are you going to die? Is death the thief poised to steal my breath the instant it takes yours? ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ so much expression in so few heart-breakingly beautiful words... you MUST be a poet?  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
The feeling looms and the unknowing is often times, all consuming. You express yourself in so many wonderful ways, suthern gal~ |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
oh lady, how well you write this feeling 'foreboding' is one of the heaviest words in the english language sending hugs and prayers |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you all... so very much. *S* |
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