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The soul of Ana
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The soul of Ana |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
The soul of Ana I took a stroll through Ana's soul it badly stained my feet I was amazed at how it hazed with cold and ugly sleet Hills of greed choked every seed so nothing good could grow Piles of deceit challenged my feet from every pore it flowed Rage was Queen a crown of mean manipulation ,showed I took a stroll through Ana's soul so dark and stale and SOLD! adagio |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Absolutely my favorite!!! smiling wide and hugging you tight  (and hey...just give me a little time, k? by this weekend maybe. You'd think with all this sun my days would be brighter huh? It's absolutely perverse, I tell ya.) I adore this poem... |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Just in case you were wondering "not her real name " and I don't think you know her but she is real. adagio |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Everybody knows an "Ana". See ya'll this weekend I hope.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ralph~ Wonderfully and poetically descriptive~ I think I've known an Ana or two in my time of life~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
adagio, Just a note to tell you I enjoy your writing. I can just imagine her! miscellanea |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Adagio... was just telling a close poet how much I appreciated and enjoyed your pennings... and the title did not give any revelation as to how the poem would be. Bravo! |
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freewheelin Member
since 2005-04-09
Posts 53 |
whoa, i really love this. its got a nice structure and a nice flow. genius. |
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Aleta Member
since 2005-04-17
Posts 102Louisiana |
Enjoyed this quick, sharp poem…. The brisk stanzas match the bitingly cold descriptions. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well done |
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youcan'tseeme Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 88 |
i like the rhyming  |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
The Soul of Ana , Wow! Adagio, I will remember this name every time I run in to a person, man or woman, like her. I know there are a few. Thanks. You did good! martyjo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
adagio, stand up and take a bow! That was an outstanding piece of writing! That "Ana" certainly gets around! ~ in more ways than one! lol Everybody has met or known at least one of someone like her in their lifetime! Rhythmically perfect and vividly descriptive! Stay clear, m'dear!  Lovin' spoonfuls of sugar, EA |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Thank you all for reading and replying. Did not really mean to sound so judgemental but when I was in this woman's presence, I got the ereiest vibe.(please pardon spelling) Havn't seen her in at least nine years or so. luckey for me! adagio |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
WOW What a splendid write my friend, and the flow was just wonderful. Tima |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Shivers .... sold to ... By writing this powerful, very well written poem you surely liberated the echoes of the past ... There are some such as these ... and they need love to find the way back into the light. Love, Margherita |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
It's hard to love a trap-door |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
 Taking this one for 1 more round |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A trap-door? I clicked on images to see what it looked like and found that there is this spider .......brrrrr You know Adagio, here in Italy they also say of a "poisonous" woman that she is like a "tarantola", which is a spider of the same family .... Yes, I agree, it's not easy to love a trap-door! ... but they too are sensitive to the vibrations of beauty and love, I bet. Love, Margherita  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ouch.....that's one walk, I'll avoid! Good write! |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
"challenged my feet" I would find another word for "challenged". Good; surprised you could get away with it. |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
I heard once a snake bit her and died |
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