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Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

0 posted 2005-05-26 02:35 PM

ground fog

it is fog

isn’t fog

cool still
air milk
poured
everywhere

stand
to a white lake
of black trees
stars so clear

while
threats of
the ground
hide in it

kneel and
the world
turns safe

but where

lost
in vague
fluorescent
white

I walk this
forever night
in ground
fog

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2005-05-26 02:43 PM

kneel and
the world
turns safe

As always... your work has so many layers... so much depth... and plundering them gives greater and greater appreciation for your talent.

The melancholy mist seeps through the screen as I read... Excellent work!!!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2005-05-26 04:21 PM

Hauntingly beautiful...love this!!

Life is one great big canvas;
throw all the paint on it you can.
-Danny Kaye

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2005-05-26 04:24 PM

I could not write a better or more meaningful reply to your wonderful write than the one that suthern wrote.

Perhaps the two of you could collaborate and write a duet?!?

One of the aspects of your writing that really appeals to me, is your ability to convey how you feel and what you see at memorable moments in time.

EA

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2005-05-26 04:37 PM

Ooooh there's sumpin bout the fog that brings out hte animal in me.. miaow heh.

love this Ed, haunting imagery masterly portrayed.

Mxx

"we all have wings, but some of us don't know why"

Michael Hutchence (INXS)

youcan'tseeme
Member

since 2004-01-30

Posts 88

5 posted 2005-05-26 05:38 PM

amazing imagry and description

well done !

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2005-05-26 08:27 PM

Ed

A very surreal feel to this, great imagery that takes me there, oh what? I am there, but no fog now in the higher elevations, just smog.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2005-05-26 08:29 PM

You, and a few other
CA poets
take me home so easily...

and that, my friend,
is a good thing.

Thank you for this pure piece
of silk cool.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

8 posted 2005-05-26 09:07 PM

The mist actually brushed by my skin as I read you...
Something like the horizon on a spring eve, just above the tree line.
Our knees always know what they are for, don't they?
Wonderful.
TD

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2005-05-26 10:33 PM

perfect

FNG
Member

since 2006-02-07

Posts 477

10 posted 2006-02-12 01:04 AM

Love this,

lost in vague flourescent white.

I walk this forever night in ground fog.

Fabulous reflection!!

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