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SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

0 posted 2005-05-24 09:16 AM

Stilled moments
captured
enraptured
in the fragile echo
of whispers
rippling dawn’s
first breath
reverberating
anticipating
that delicate
inhale
before the
shattering
scattering
of you
into the remnants
of night’s
dreaming
in shuddered sigh
...I
exhale
love....

~SEA~

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2005-05-24 09:18 AM

Absolutely enchanting!

Love, Margherita

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2005-05-24 09:58 AM

captured
enraptured
in the fragile echo
of whispers
rippling dawn’s
first breath
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

and you exhaled some lovely poetry too.

love this one, classic SEA-sigh poetry.

I am sure of my reasons, embracing the seasons,
and the sacred simplicity of you at my side.

Vienna Teng

Jezzika
Member

since 2005-01-05

Posts 154
work

3 posted 2005-05-24 10:17 AM

"Stilled moments
captured
enraptured
in the fragile echo"

loved this part... the whole poem was awesome...*smiles*

Jezzika

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2005-05-24 10:27 AM

that is how is should be
captured
raptured
before the dawn

enjoyed this ms suesea

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2005-05-24 10:35 AM

"in shuddered sigh
...I
exhale
love...."

Yes..as it should be.
Beautiful piece of work here Susan.
Very much enjoyed the read.
Hugs~Nancy

Life is one great big canvas;
throw all the paint on it you can.
-Danny Kaye

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2005-05-24 10:39 AM

Ah dang...
I need to send
you some
early morning
thoughts...

we're in sync...

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

7 posted 2005-05-24 10:42 AM

beautiful poetic exhaling Lady! BEAUTIFUL!!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2005-05-24 01:23 PM

WomanOfTheSEA~
Can you hear the applause ?

This is lovely ... sooooooooo you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

Email noles1@totcon.com

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

9 posted 2005-05-24 03:56 PM

gorgeous -

S

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

10 posted 2005-05-24 10:46 PM

Awwww Sea, you always did write beautiful poetry. And, I always enjoy reading it.

Canuckster
Member

since 2002-01-09

Posts 285
New Mexico, USA

11 posted 2005-05-24 11:05 PM

Beautiful. Image and words go together. Your echoes shadowing through subsequent lines achieves the desired impact. Well done.

never try to teach a pig to sing
it wastes your time AND annoys the pig

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

12 posted 2005-05-24 11:15 PM

Perfect !! Hugs for this. Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Aleta
Member

since 2005-04-17

Posts 102
Louisiana

13 posted 2005-05-24 11:59 PM

Delicate as the moment before morning stirrings… Lovely write.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

14 posted 2005-05-25 12:22 PM

thank you all very very much for the wonderful replies!!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

15 posted 2005-05-25 08:06 AM

wow! how beautiful!

Ethan Halo
Senior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

16 posted 2005-05-26 10:20 PM

some mornings, after an intense dream like that...
that is exactly how i feel.

magnificent and truly beautiful.

we all got somethin' to atone for...

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

17 posted 2005-05-26 11:08 PM

i've known this feeling..no wait that was gas. it's the only feeling worth feeling(l#ve, not gas) and the most elusive for some

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

18 posted 2005-05-28 06:19 AM

beautiful~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

19 posted 2005-06-03 02:37 AM

Nice...James

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

20 posted 2005-06-03 04:03 AM

Oh, yes, a beautiful write!

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