Open Poetry #35 |
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To have and to hold(repost because the hummingbirds are here and he isn't) |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
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shrilly zinging at breakneck speeds to descend earthward in delight, only to turn about face upward so fast as to alarm even split second timing straight up winged flight dizzies Look at me mom look at me fly solo soars now more often than not, apron strings flap wildly barely he is tied by the need for mother’s appreciation so momma prayed that each day given not be the one when he would double dare the sun and until thirty six days into his twenty ninth year her prayers were answered now as ashen remains are safely gathered forever after to have and to hold, denial’s inward gaze embraces the picture of his tiny open mouth waiting to suckle but love insists she lift her head and recall the beauty of his zinging across the sky and press into her memory for the sound of Look at me mom look at me fly |
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Greeneyes![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
but love insists she lift her head and recall the beauty of his zinging across the sky and press into her memory for the sound of Look at me mom look at me fly ~*~ I think you know the press of my hugs... K |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
So much love is wrapped in these words... how I wish I could wrap you in my arms... Love you, lady... |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Ah, it must hurt to remember the beauty of his flight and know that you will never see it again. May God bring you comfort and new joy. Ben “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I'm lost for words, except to say, this is a loud heartbeat write. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
should I hold back the wings of a sparrow because I could not fly or should I let my mind grow wings and join there at that heaven place enjoyed your art jb |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
"so momma prayed that each day given not be the one when he would double dare the sun and until thirty six days into his twenty ninth year her prayers were answered now as ashen remains are safely gathered forever after to have and to hold," this brought tears to rise~ moving, moving poem! **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
jellybeans I think that sometimes a spirit will choose a creature such as a hummingbird or butterfly, to bring a message to a person that they love and that is grieving for them. Then, just the sight of such will bring back the waves of grief, yes, but also the joy of the memory. A very touching poem...I want you to know I understand. ![]() |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I'm crying. Sorry. This is so full of love. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JellyGal~ Were it not for the pure love of loving you ... I couldn't even leave a reply that tries to slip between the tears~ Because of loving you ... and of knowing the love and loss of which you write ... I will sit here and read this piece of your heart many times in days to come~ 'but love insists she lift her head and recall the beauty of his zinging across the sky and press into her memory for the sound of Look at me mom look at me fly' And when the hummers fly ... as they are doing right now ... I will remember and will think of you ... and of the precious son you lost~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
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thank you all so much...my son was the most handsome man I know, and that's not just momma talk, he had women troubles since he was in grade school *s*, he had a beautiful heart, talent...he had it all...but he also had a love of danger, and addiction to adrenaline, and later to other substances which too soon took his life...sigh at our house we have 30+ hummingbirds every year and I hang about 6 feeders up on the balcony and sit and watch them when I need solace.... last year when watching I could hear one going straight up and then down as fast as he could, up and then down...it was a young one flying for the sheer thrill of it.....well it was like my son was before me, and I wrote this to try to bring out his beauty and my love.....thank you for letting me share it and him with you Greeneyes, thank you K yes I do…thank you….sigh, where would we be without friends to help us through? Suthern, your friendship does just that lady, you mean much to me ![]() Ben He does, His comfort is what keeps me standing, thank you midnite thankyou Dark, thank you, your words hit perfectly, for I would take on hummer wings in a heartbeat Martie, I know you do and thank you, it’s a sad thing to have in common, but somehow it helps to share…sigh Nan, thank you, I am crying too Marge, thank you lady, that the hummers will bring your heart closer to mine is a wonderful thought ![]() |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"but love insists she lift her head and recall the beauty of his zinging across the sky and press into her memory for the sound of Look at me mom look at me fly" ~Hugging you tight sweet lady~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
wrappin my arms around you and huggin you tight.... he flies girl... and so do you... ![]() |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
I just returned from Mexico where I visted my Mom and the ashes of my father. The hummingbirds I saw as well and you have captured so much in the rythms and dartings of your work. Well done. never try to teach a pig to sing |
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VBallNut Member
since 2003-02-12
Posts 60Virginia, USA |
Jellybeans ~ This is an absolutely beautiful poem to celebrate the reincarnation of your son. Hummingbirds are fascinating characters - I love to watch them flit about and I'm sure your son was an amazing person. Very sorry for your loss, but very glad that he is still letting you know he is here with you. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
K, I've read every poem you have posted on this site and absolutely none of them has reached me the way this one has. This is really incredible writing, not only because of the topic, but the way you have molded the words together to weave the different emotions into a tapestry of feelings so intense and sad that I feel drained reading them. Such an incredible ending you gave it...I can hear your son's voice saying those words... This is really special, lady ![]() |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is such a beautiful and heartfelt piece, Jellybeans. ![]() Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
JB, I don't know what to say I'm left speechless, through tears. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
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Enchantress….thank you….hugging back… GS thank you lady…*hugging back* Canuckster, thank you, the hummingbirds are my solace, how a sugar induced high energy free for all can be a solace I don’t know……lol…guess that says much about my life VballNut thank you for your care and your comments Bal, thank you….you felt the very essence of this, for I wanted to most to show his beauty, thank you for reading me and for caring kit, thank you ps, thank you lady, your tears fall with mine |
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