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Open Poetry #35

I read from left to right

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2005-05-18 10:45 AM

The magic isles of yesteryear
silent in retreat
lie as abandoned orphans
on blueprints of the future
indistinctly hanging
on a wall of mystery.

No dynamite explosion
to spread and dissipate
the building bricks of time
basking so at ease
in the sunlight of my life.

How unconcerned the lowly sparks
of my everyday
plot the fire of my demise
like an architect draws plans
and I am quite amazed
at my acquiescence
to the aging process.

Accepted as a norm,
this turn away from youth
and hence I suffer the distress
born of human consciousness
until wrapped, and parceled,
and consigned,
to the un-conceptualized
but seemingly quite real
magic isles of invisibility.

Plans, blueprints, building bricks,
and I read from left to right
but present into past, life into death,
and I am left surprised
at mind’s lack of suppleness
to grasp and contort around
an all for nought endeavour.

Simpleminded and I cry,
but one day a knowing smile!

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2005-05-18 12:35 PM

How unconcerned the lowly sparks
of my everyday
plot the fire of my demise
like an architect draws plans
and I am quite amazed
at my acquiescence
to the aging process.

Wow, the entire poem was excellent, but this..this reminds us, that it's out of our control, and hey, mankind loses themselves when they cannot control, but you accept, and realize perhaps not the purpose, but the significance. Well done!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2005-05-18 02:19 PM

Thanks so much LeeJ. I really do appreciate the read and your comment. I wonder if the mind will ever be strong enough to halt the aging process. I'm testing the system but I guess I'm just not getting it right.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2005-05-18 02:39 PM

another good write Helen

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