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Blissful Jealousy
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Blissful Jealousy |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Blissful Jealousy You have sharpened your blade not in site of day but by shadows in your mind, of a candle’s shade… I, yet forewarned, know only the event to come. Not the year, or day; as your breath at night’s sleep has kept me silently warm… Polished steel will seek my heart, on your minds command, its guide will be your laughter and, jealousy, its start… When your deed is done, my blood and your tears intermingled, both will salute years past, ending your spite for living free and, at last, your blissful jealously… |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Jelousy is one of the ugliest things I can think of. But nvertheless a very well written poem.:< adagio |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
This is very well expressed. I loved your analagies and comparisons. Kristabell |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I, yet forewarned, know only the event to come. Not the year, or day; as your breath at night’s sleep has kept me silently warm… Awesome writing! More please.  hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Sharp and clear, and one of your very best writes JL. A very sobering reminder of the edge... TD |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Hey JL, good Morning... This is a totally different style of you then I'm used to reading...I've always thought your poetry to be tremendous, but this, is amazingly good...and for me, tops all your writings, now, one of my favorites... Jealousy, is a green disease...which is the beginning of the end....it corrupts anything that was solid and good...and you've certainly showed the sharp edge of it...well done, my friend, well done! Happy Friday! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
If I didn't know better I would say you'd been in my mirror... thank you for this, poet... it is amazing that jealousy comes in many forms... and the worst of it steals... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You have sharpened your blade not in site of day but by shadows in your mind, of a candle’s shade… that is a very very cool verse... This is a clever write...impressive use of metaphor and symbolism as well as form... I loved your rhyme scheme in this...it read aloud delightfully. Very well done poet JL |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
JL, take a bow! This was an excellent poetic reminder of the havoc and destruction that can be wreaked when the green-eyed monster raises its ugly head. Very well done! Hugs with love, EA |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Thanks to all. All you people inspire. Thanks!! JL:) |
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