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Lost Memories
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Lost Memories |
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longte Member
since 2005-04-06
Posts 199Australia |
Lost Memories??? I took the memories and pain and put them in a box I thought they'd be safe in there because of all the locks So then I walked away from them and tried to live my life Just walked away from memories and into hate and strife My life was torn and ripped apart in oh so many ways And most of my relationships lasted only days The silent screams inside my mind were dragging me to hell One day was love.. the next was hate.. never could I tell When finally I found my love I found it hard to trust In the recess of my mind ... the locks began to rust Then tiny fragments from the past slid into my head One hour I'd want them for my love.. then I'd want them dead All the love that I was shown I'd turn to hate instead And all the time they fell apart...those boxes in my head It was always something different that changed me every day A look...A touch..A smell...A thought...I'd never know the way We'd be sitting down to dinner and they'd just smile at me And a rusted box would slip one out... A hated memory A smile I knew was full of love...would drag out childhood fears A night that promised so much love would sadly end in tears So if you have the thought you can keep things in a box Remember please what I have found.. You cannot trust the locks Please feel free to comment in any fashion about this Live It |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
well said and written. I wonder sometimes maybe if the locks rust for reasons we don't always understand. Enjoyed this. |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
You keep yours locked in boxes and yet, I hide mine in black and white keys! This flowed so well in rhythm and thought. sadie |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
excellent piece love the theme! the rhyming is very well done too and the ending is perfect |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
and by the way Welcome to Passions  I will be looking forward to reading more of your work |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Bravo! I like this style...  I also like Banjo Paterson, and now I have another Australian favorite... Good job, form and story line.... __________ice ><> Welcome to pip, hope to see much more of your poetry here.... |
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longte Member
since 2005-04-06
Posts 199Australia |
Thankyou all for your comments Very new here so didn't want to keep replying and putting this at the top all the time It's actually part of a few poems I wrote about the effects of child abuse once again Thanks Some very interesting reading here |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to Passions... the theme of your write was excellent, and delivered with honesty and good will. Looking forward to more. TD |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Just catching up and thought this well worth going back to the top. Best to you, martyjo [This message has been edited by latearrival (05-13-2005 07:55 PM).] |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
Wow!!! Just wow!! I can relate to this well. OMG! Actually I am showing my mom this one. Sounds odd but you just explained my thoughts I have at times. Excellent. I can't believe I missed this one. |
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