Open Poetry #35 |
Little boy laughing |
inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
"Wake up, lay down" "wake up ,lay down" we played a game and you were half a moon in 6months size, little boy laughing i dreamt you last night into the hazy hours, as the sun turns the corner, then i woke in tears; a mother feels love, but we've all grown older, "wake up, lay down" i kiss you goodnight for the umpteenth time, then woke in a face of a middle aged moment, and called my own mother, grateful, for shared reflections at the sands of our shadows. [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (05-13-2005 11:47 AM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
inky, this portrays that moment well...so many wonderful lines in this...creative and heartfelt...thank you for sharing this moment, that we've all known so well. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
playful inky....the soft of you is leaking into artful love..enjoyed you here |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm glad you called her, Michele... you wove this one well. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Michelle, this touches to tears... a beautiful moment captured forever. Very well done, one of your best ever hon. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
inkedgoddess Always nice t talk to mom. Injoyed the write. |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
This big boy knows what to do.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Perfect sweet lady. A precious moment captured in time... ~Hugs, Nancy~ Life is one great big canvas; |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Oh, geez Michele, you make me remember what I should be grateful for. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
enjoyed~ My spirit will rise |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
felt this one - and it was vivid- Susan If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful and poignant... and I'm betting your Mom understood perfectly. *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You capture moments in time so vividly in your poetry, that I get flashbacks of them from time to time. You are a poetess extraordinaire! Through the raising of my own daughters, I have come to appreciate my Mom even more! Linda |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
heartfelt write |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"then woke in a face of a middle aged moment," love this!! smiling at the feeling M |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
A lovely poem, Ms. Goddess.... Calling your mother was a very good idea, because she is the one who was filled with emotion when you first walked out the door; This poem is filled with that same kind of emotion. Malvina Reynolds wrote and sang that emotion in her beautiful song "Turn Around". Perhaps you know the song? (excerpt) "Where are you going, my little one, little one? Where are you going, my baby, my own? Turn around and you're two. Turn around and you're four. Turn around and you're a young girl going out of the door." (use girl or boy, whatever fits) Your poem reminded me of this song.... Thank you ------------ice ><> |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for reading and understanding |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This one moved me so deeply, dear Michele! It brought memories and emotions. Moments in the circle of life, captured so beautifully. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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