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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2005-05-12 02:11 AM

I stand over him and think
we have everything
it takes
for a classic to be lived
the journey of the hero
is
nothing more than folks like us
doing
unexpectedly
the thing that's most miraculous
living righteous anyway
in spite of ports mysterious
gnarling finger beckoning
with palms in lean of heaviness
of coconut and jumping fish
in lagoons of promising
and sirens whipping currents in
to tides that we don't mind
it is
tempting to release the knots
of sails in tatter to the fray
fighting weary winds
to stay
letting loose
of all the loss
heavy chests of gold-glimmed gems
to the bottom of the sea
swimming to the beach
to be
all alone
together in
a test of wits
and love is this:

braided palms and vines entwined
and daily our attentiveness
of oils and necessity
of survival's loyalty
when we must and when we had
each other for our company

then, I think we had a chance
and the love was grander than
some two minute ritual
in the morning
bladder full
wishing you were faster than
one point five nine minutes as
I time my lack of sleep.

We could be mythology.
We could be as gods again.
We could teach some seminars
and tell the others how to be

phony

just like us...

timothysangel1973

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since 2001-12-03

Posts 1725
Never close enough

1 posted 2005-05-12 02:14 AM

WOW Serenity... that packs a real punch.
Especially this:

"We could be mythology.
We could be as gods again.
We could teach some seminars
and tell the others how to be

phony

just like us..."

I love your muse and your pen !!

Thank You for sharing this so late in the evening, I really enjoyed the read.

Tima

I may hate myself in the morning - but I'm gonna love you tonight
-Lee Ann Womack

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

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2 posted 2005-05-12 02:35 AM

thank you tima, and yep, I edited, and I thank you because your reply showed me where the ending was...

sometimes I just rattle on and on.

love ya lady

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

3 posted 2005-05-12 08:10 AM

Rattle the cages a little more...

it started out one way for me,
ended up on another plane altogether...

and I swear I could hear you
reading this one
out loud...

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

4 posted 2005-05-12 08:14 AM

gotta agree with sunshine...your muse is amazing, this was like watching a movie, and thinking you know how it's going to end, but what makes the movie climatic, is the fact, that it wasn't anything or anyway, you thought...you pulled me in, and set me down...with a whole other perspective...

what a write!

Morning Serenity...

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2005-05-12 08:15 AM

serenity,
This was no rattle prattle but a gust of wind that blew me away. Excellent

Gentle Spirit
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Posts 13989

6 posted 2005-05-12 08:33 AM

I have to agree with Sunshine K...
as I was reading this it was as though I was hearing a different voice reading it...

and yep....I knew it was the voice of
Serenity

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper
nah, still nothing~
my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

7 posted 2005-05-12 09:58 AM

Well now .....

My mind is now wrapped around yet another write of yours for the day !!
THE BOOK..THE BOOK...MY KINGDOM FOR THE BOOK !!!! luv ya!

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

8 posted 2005-05-12 01:55 PM

"then, I think we had a chance
and the love was grander than
some two minute ritual
in the morning
bladder full
wishing you were faster than
one point five nine minutes as
I time my lack of sleep.

We could be mythology.
We could be as gods again.
We could teach some seminars
and tell the others how to be

phony

just like us..."

Dang lady!! I know this..feel it!!
Love ya Ser.

Martie

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9 posted 2005-05-12 02:17 PM

Karen

That ending....could be the ending of so many, including me. Thanks for this truth telling!

adagio
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since 2005-03-19

Posts 449
Marrero, La.

10 posted 2005-05-12 03:28 PM

karen-
Well done. I liked it much. It seems something we have in common is writing stuff that is kind of personal.Keep it up!

adagio

latearrival
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Florida

11 posted 2005-05-12 03:38 PM

'We could teach some seminars
and tell the others how to be

phony

just like us..."

I think we might be amazed how many are living under a mask. They just do not admit it or worse yet don't even know they are living phony. best marty

Dark Angel
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12 posted 2005-05-15 06:40 PM

"when we must and when we had
each other for our company"

these lines spoke to me, sitting here, trying to recall....when.

love you m'lady

"we all have wings, but some of us don't know why"

Michael Hutchence (INXS)

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

13 posted 2005-05-17 04:07 AM

choose life . . .

http://www.davidpbrown.co.uk/poetry/john-hodge.html

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