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exhale
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since 2003-06-13
Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2005-05-09 11:59 AM


she's decided to fly out of his life
like a bird caught in an updraft
powerless
no choice
because he's suffocating her
and birds need air

her life could be defined by that updraft
as if it were her mind
telling her to fly away
everytime things got hard

his love was in the air
and then so was she
his words floated past her
and her eyes froze
and her heart froze
but her wings open

she's decided to fly out of his life
like a bird caught trapped in an updraft
powerless
no choice
because his love
his love
is saving her
and she can't seem to stay.





p.s so i was sitting in school after a test and i just wanted to breathe..so i did.



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LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

1 posted 2005-05-09 12:05 PM


sometimes, love can be way to possessive and smothering...two people must grow together, if that means allowing, and encouraging another to succeed....this speaks of a relationship which would be destroyed by control.  

Well done

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