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Open Poetry #35

stripped

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

0 posted 2005-05-08 10:33 PM

torn open
   exposed from the
          inside out
stolen f  r  a  g  men t  s
of my being
     never shown
   now freely worn
     on your sleeve
   stripped down
to nothing
       tearing new
           holes in my
swiss demeanor
     left with nothing
          but crumbs
  to be swept away

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2005-05-08 10:37 PM

Wow...powerfully written.
The presentation is excellent...
Left me thinking that perhaps the swiss exterior is not needed...just the you.
Well done.
TD

pharon
Member

since 1999-11-13

Posts 251
alabama

2 posted 2005-05-08 11:17 PM

thanks for the response -- i've been gone from these forums for years but decided to come back. haven't put pen to paper (or finger to keys) in about as long.

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

3 posted 2005-07-01 09:25 PM

Interesting read.
Enjoyed it.
Welcome back.

:-)

<^^> Today the pond....Tomorrow the world

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2005-07-01 10:32 PM

Very much enjoyed this piece!
Welcome Back!!

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2005-07-02 01:04 AM

Well, welcome back! It's nice to meet you!

"stolen fragments
of my being
     never shown
   now freely worn
     on your sleeve"
oh, a fragmented heart...I understand

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2005-07-02 03:30 AM

well done

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