»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #35
»
Only When Alone
| Open Poetry #35 |
|
Only When Alone |
|
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
|
Only When Alone odd, but it’s always been that way tragedies strike, she moves in quiet tandem with wind and sun to hurry along the source of hope, winding words into bandages words of “it will be all right,” as hands pluck at coverlets to warm again the soul of those in need… she will not take in the air that you need to breathe through this catastrophe, but holds on to whatever she holds on to, it’s not yet her time… she becomes focused on the needs and heeds others in their time, knowing that their pain is more, just now their needs are more, just now and says naught but “it will be all right,” knowing that will never be enough to wipe the memories clean of what once was how change comes so rapidly… as the dust settles, as night befalls the day’s warm, as the dry earth melts into fog’s embrace, and soaks in the vague clouds that mist over, time moves on… and so it will be, who will know when, days, weeks, months shall roll by, inextricably, but only when alone, will she cry |
||
| © Copyright 2005 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you could be talking about any woman I know here excellent write |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sissie....she sounds familiar to me, too! You have such an empathetic heart!  |
||
|
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Karilea.. well done! Hugs~N In the midst of winter, |
||
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Here, have a whole truck load of hugs... spread them around...share at will... Sheesh.... |
||
Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I still wish that I could write the way that you do......effortlessly. hugs, Chrislane |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
she moves in quiet tandem with wind and sun to hurry along the source of hope, winding words into bandages words of “it will be all right,” as hands pluck at coverlets to warm again the soul of those in need… she will not take in the air that you need to breathe through this catastrophe, but holds on to whatever she holds on to, ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ reads like warm rays of sunshine  one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
||
|
kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
This is a splendid tale of sad introspection. Well done. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
||
|
MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
can always count on you for a ray of sunshine |
||
|
SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is a wonderful poem, Karilea! That is the only time I cry, too. |
||
|
LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I cannot highlight one sentence in this poetic vision, as the entire poem has compassion spelled all over it... Hugs dear lady for a grand read this morning |
||
|
Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I dont even have the words for this one right now... damn.... |
||
|
Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
For you to have been able to write so convincingly ~ and knowingly, I believe that you too, are such a woman. Love & Sun Light, Linda  |
||
|
Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Sound like woman to me. Strong on the outside, always giving and helping never letting anyone see her pain or her tears.  amazingly insightful..but then I have a feeling you have first hand knowledge."cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
||
|
latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Yes, you have spoken for all of us. And I ask, when does it end? Who is there to help us through those sad times brought on to us by others, but whom we have to try and help. Mostly we can not be comforted because we are so used to being the nurturer and cannot seem to accept help for ourselves. After we give our love, time, money, even our blood, the tears still flow in our quiet time, because we can not help those who will not try. In the end who is there to comfort us and rock us to sleep? marty |
||
|
suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
but only when alone, will she cry With grace and beauty, you write the hearts of many. |
||
|
LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I had to come back for another read...and while reading, I thought of my grand-daughter, such a beautiful trusting child...as we all were at one time...and I can't help but ask myself...what gives anyone the right to cause such pain, grief and take that world like flower away? Kari...sending hugs for such a poem that all should read...this should definately be published. |
||
Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
but only when alone, will she cry''' ~~ How true--there is a soft ache in this.....hugssss you....  ~~*~~ |
||
|
JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"but only when alone, will she cry" This does say a lot... JL  |
||
|
Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
1derful! I'd like to discuss this with you further... Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
||
|
miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
You bring home the image of a strong, gentle person. I can think of many like this, but it reminded me so much of my mother. Enjoyed! miscellanea |
||
|
BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
as the dust settles, as night befalls the day’s warm, as the dry earth melts into fog’s embrace, and soaks in the vague clouds that mist over, time moves on… That is such a lovely verse, and this is a rare beauty. Your poetry never fails to move me, Karilea~ |
||
|
SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
oh...I hope you know how much this touches me, yes, if anyone does know, it's you. |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
