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You do a horrible impression of me.
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You do a horrible impression of me. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow 
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Your words are like shrapnel in my skull, there are times before this that I thought about what I've done to complicate the simplistic crown upon your head. I've struck you, with all my strength, I've hit you, and what's more is that a million painful and insulting stings were resting in my hand, and I hope and pray that you sob like a child, I simply want you to understand my misery. . . . You are bleeding, and I feel such bitter satisfaction, don't you think you deserved it? Like you've said, there are so much worse things in the world in my head, equal signs don't exist. I am so sorry, I should've been more compassionate, sympathetic, but you are so selfish that I cannot help it. I have to haunt you, I hope that you notice... . . . ..I have shattered in my skin, for my guilt is what kills me and my heart is dark with stains of sinful acts...All I know is that I've died with hot blood running in my veins.. You remain, silent and bruised, my last words. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I have felt this before Meg, a very long time ago when I was a child and when I read your words it brought me right back to that exact place, which is good because that is what good writing is meant to do. You completely blew me away with this, I think it is the best thing I have ever read from you. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
No need for iron daggers, wolf's bane, silver bullets, holy water, mirrors reflecting the rise of the sun. Nope. As romantic as all of that may read, all it really takes is this: "I have shattered in my skin, for my guilt is what kills me"  A powerful write and I have the distinct feeling there is more to come. sigh. Wish I'd written this lovie. Lawd knows I feel it.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yaknow Meg...I need this, just to make sense of what I feel these days thank you |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I have shattered in my skin, for my guilt is what kills me and my heart is dark with stains of sinful acts...All I know is that I've died with hot blood running in my veins.. You remain, I believe Meg, hurting others brings us to our knees...and to, those who love us, also understand us, for who we are, no fantasy, just real core emotions, which sometime run amuck...we are all subject to error and defeat...hugs dear one, for such splendid literature...you really Rock! |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Thank you. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Did this strike a chord with me Meg, and a sour note it was! Hang in there, it does get better. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Powerful. Eric |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
hug. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"I simply want you to understand my misery." sigh, such a basic plea |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Such a powerful and painful write Meghan. Heart hugs~Nancy Life is one great big canvas; |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
powerful, yet vulnerable. the last part just had to have been my favorite part. this was just so amazingly written. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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