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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ Wading through the highest tides diving beneath ten foot waves that would break weathering a thousand storms in spite of so many passing's, you kept a watchful eye and I never lost sight of your ship. Finally, we're getting closer somewhere between here and now, not so faraway. I read you like a map over and over trying to comprehend our course as I feel my way through dense fog. Breathing in the mist of another place and time, I forgot to remember. I cry freely that I lost my way so easily rubbing salt in my wounds pressing wet on your lips. Oh, surrender me to the wind and this endless journey we're on. I will tow the line forever if it leads back to you and I will never let go and I won't ever stop believing that love will find a way if you'll have me. As sure as the sun rises warm and willing you're all that I need and I'm weary of dreaming. For the sky is clearing and the sea is not bluer on the other side of a swoon. ~*~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
So hard to pick lines....but I pick these, because I do so wish they'd come to me! I will tow the line forever if it leads back to you Steadfast...that's the way. You are a jewel, Lori...a ruby set in these blue pages. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
on the other side of a swoon. Oh how i love the image of the above line. I wish i had written it.  LoriMxx "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori " I will never let go and I won't ever stop believing that love will find a way" I have always believed that it will...I hope that we are both right! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Ed~ Thank you for always being so nice, and for believing in me. (even if I am cantankerous) Your kindness means a lot. Maree~ Yea, a swoon is just a swoon, when in fact, the colors were the truest blue all along. (I just didn't see it) You're sweet, thank you so much. Martie~ I'm not big on sinking or swimming, I want to stay right here forever. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and reply to me. Thank you always. |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
taken by such ripples as these words I am ... swooned. well done with a smile!  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Dear Craig, thank you for that, and for sharing your smile with me. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
I will tow the line forever if it leads back to you and I will never let go and I won't ever stop believing that love will find a way if you'll have me. such longing, such a heartfelt plea , i'll cross my fingers for you here, your blondeness......... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and the sea is not bluer on the other side of a swoon. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ now theres a line I wish I had wrote... another lovely heart on sleeve done Bluesy style.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a heartfelt write, very touching |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
bluezzzy...this is some kind of lady...enjoyed reading her here |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"I read you like a map over and over trying to comprehend our course as I feel my way through dense fog. Breathing in the mist of another place and time, I forgot to remember." ~ My picking out the above lines is in a way, doing the other lines an injustice! Lori, this may be one of my personal favourites of your poems that I have had the pleasure of reading. This is truly a remarkle example of remarkable you! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
An awesome write Lori...very much enjoyed!! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ Life is one great big canvas; |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I will tow the line forever if it leads back to you and I will never let go and I won't ever stop believing that love will find a way if you'll have me" Beautiful words and deeply felt meaning. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your blondness, who me? Not really a plea so much as the way it is. Thank you Michele. Janet Marie~ Gawd, I have no style, my sleeve just happens to fall close to my heart, and I want more than anything to do right by it. Thank you. Thank you for stopping by, Dixie~ Dark Stranger~ Well, I can't undo the past, it is like the clouds parting ways, then turn down the edges so softly. It's a reminder that nothing stays the same, for better or for worse. Thanks for taking the time for me. Hi Linda~ I'm glad you liked that verse. It's true, sometimes I forget to remember what is most important. Thank you for your support and kind words. Nancy~ Thank you for sharing your heart here. Smiling back at you!! Susan C~ What a nice surprise, I am so pleased that the meaning wasn't lost. Thank you very much for the visit, it means a lot. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice romantic writing...James |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Bluesy, As always, I enjoy your writing and the journey you where you take me. Wish romance didn't seem like the forever-imbalancing-scale! If for more than a moment, we can achieve that perfect balance between two people... Good luck to you, Bluesy. "For the sky is clearing and the sea is not bluer on the other side of a swoon." Loving this! Me thinks you're being pretty clever with word play. (I can hear the melody of Blue Moon approaching!) miscellanea |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
ah so nice to see you bluesy, beautiful write |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
James~ Thanks a bunch, from one hopeless romantic to another. Misce~ Living for the moment is easier said than done, but then again, those are the moments we live for! How's that for word play? Your replies are so sweet and I can't thank you enough for sharing your sweet soul with me. Ah, Raph~ Thanks for the beautiful....you!! That was awful nice of you to say so. |
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