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ice
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0 posted 2005-05-04 07:47 AM



On a twelve car train,
The Porter wakes passengers
Telling them engine-April
It is pulling into station,
To hook up to a Pullman,
Named the month of May.

With a pant and a wheeze;
The boiler tank fills,
Building pressure
As it lets off the steam
Of last winters passengers.

In a field nearby the depot:

Cold rain mixes with snow,
Chilling the bones
Of a man on a tractor,
Pulling plows,
Setting tables
For half-frozen robins.


© Copyright 2005 ford hume - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2005-05-04 07:49 AM


Ford, this is outstanding....filled with incedible metaphors and imagery...

Brava sir....simply brava!!  Indeed a

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2 posted 2005-05-04 09:01 AM


And the chugging resumes...
even attempting the uphill run.

You're such a joy to read, Sir.

Thank you.

Midnitesun
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3 posted 2005-05-04 09:58 AM


What an enjoyable read! outstanding use of metaphor and imagery. I especially like that table setting.
Ford, it's raining here today, and all the birds are hiding, but it isn't a terribly cold spring.

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4 posted 2005-05-04 12:45 PM


what a write!

awesome!

LeeJ
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5 posted 2005-05-04 01:14 PM


this finds spring, arms folded in front of her, singing, I know I can, I know I can...

It's cloudy and cool here in these them parts of PA, hope this won't be an instant replay of last summer?

Thank you Ford, a very creative way to look at nature

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6 posted 2005-05-04 09:25 PM


A picture is worth a thousand words, and/or vice versa.

Your poetry is superb, and your style unsurpassed.  

Very much enjoyed, ford~

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7 posted 2005-05-04 09:46 PM


Ford, I had to read this again, and say, the rain quit early in the day then the temp suddenly soared to 72F!
Listening to the baby bluebirds in a nest on the neighbors covered porch. Dang, I love what spring can bring!

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8 posted 2005-05-04 11:30 PM


Awesome write Ford. Enjoyed. hugs, Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

ice
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9 posted 2005-05-05 07:09 AM


Thank you friends......
I appreciate your comments....

When May comes, I usually can put away the long-johns...but not this year.....The last week has been miserable.

Had a fire in my woodstove every morning, stnow, cold rain, and hail has come in blasts between short periods of weak sunshine....

This weekend looks good though, perhaps it is the end of "half frozen robin" season?

again, Thank You
----------ice/ford

froggy
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10 posted 2005-05-06 04:00 PM


Hey Ford,
  Love this piece.
The warm weather is on its way.
:-)

<^^> Today the pond....Tomorrow the world

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11 posted 2005-05-06 04:14 PM


I enjoy the unique way you have of painting vivid vignettes that remain in my mind long after I have read one of your fine poems.

~ May Spring soon wrap you in a warm, sunny blanket of wildflowers.

Linda

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12 posted 2005-05-06 04:24 PM


Not to mention certain reefers and the threat of hotboxes under those summer cars.

Enjoyed!

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13 posted 2005-05-06 05:34 PM


Wonderful imagery...I very much enjoyed this.

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

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