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Coloring Excuse
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Coloring Excuse |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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Coloring Clouds Refining some false truth Risking absurdity Holding a never ending book Fiction becomes a simile Like a soldier in prayer Foretelling supposed to be’s With mournful cries Conjuring an enthusiastic nuisance Music runs and hides To call upon some long lost words Of which I molded from clay into A golden bust of your visage Sitting on my fireplace Highlighting a God spell of silence Months turning into years To far fetched for me to reach A turning season Playing its final cards With that infatuating grin The one that says “It doesn’t hurt to try” While watching the world go by On a hill, where sun fells into night Hay days wither into the panorama Now dignified with contributions Photographs rolling the dice and loosing Cupping my hands and Catching hints of sappy tributes Like a verse of transient birth dates Echoing animated shapes Depicting ruthless excuse Submission sits by my side Poking me in the ribs Grateful for amber waves Those, trite figures of speech Occupants of nostalgia Touching summer days That, I then, could never reach |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ This was a delight to read. As is all of your poetry. Have a happy weekend. Missed you too.  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
ummmm Lee? yanno what, I believe this is truly your best ever and I'm tucking it into my library. I can't even highlight my favorite stanza's as each is a delight to read! I really want to care, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Cupping my hands and Catching hints of sappy tributes Like a verse of transient birth dates Echoing animated shapes Depicting ruthless excuse Submission sits by my side Poking me in the ribs Grateful for amber waves ~*~ Grateful for the read... |
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~K~ Member
since 2004-07-27
Posts 148 |
"Highlighting a God spell of silence" This screams beauty to me.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
you just keep unraveling the hem of that suggestion and I wait to see more enjoyed you ms lee j |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Sometimes reading a poem of yours is like watching a sunset.... The most beautiful moment? Each one. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a perfect write |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
I liked this one a whole lot. I read it twice Quite inspirational adagio |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"trite figures of speech" indeed, I'll say another..... You seem to be "coloring outside the lines" in your life right now...Hey, that phrase goes along with the title, in an odd way... Your strong poems stay within them though; Your pen, a steady held crayola...guided by the mind to stay inside the margins.. ------------ice/ford ><> |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Lee, what can I say but a wonderful piece of writing once again, you have such a way with words my friend. Sincerely Rick |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hi LeeJ. Loved this poem. I know I do not come in often and comment on all the wonderful poems people post. Seems I am always busy getting ready to be somewhere else...but today I am making an exception and I want to tell you how very much I loved this poem. Bravo my friend. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
While watching the world go by On a hill, where sun falls into night Hay days wither into the panorama Now dignified with contributions Photographs rolling the dice and loosing Your mind "develops" your visions in amazing pictures through your pen! Loved especially the above lines ... can smell the hay ... Love, Margherita |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Lee I really enjoyed this Dave |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
LeeJ, this is amazing, just amazing! Sauni:) |
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MyHeartofShadows Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 88Hyattsville, MD |
Enjoyed, bumping back to the top so others can enjoy a bit longer. |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Lee , another excellent write , you have amazing vision , Hope |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Your poetry is life that you have managed to capture in thoughts and expressive verse. The above replies tell the story of how you can captivate a reader within your writings. So much emotion in this write, Lee J. Very nice. JL |
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