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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2005-04-28 05:57 PM


How sweet the smell of smoke
rising from a woodman’s fire
amidst the rocks and boulders
of this concrete jungle, home.  

Down I go on knees; nothing here it seems
but senses do not lie or offer me a bribe
to light the flame of passion
and elevate desire
beyond the blue of sky.

Head tilted I breathe in
in, in, and deeper in,
but let me pause a spell;
could it be the fires of hell
burning to a cinder
love’s magic and mystique?

Yes, ‘tis so; the serpent knows
how swiftly evil strikes
when the woodman goes a-chopping,
not today but other days,
to fuel the fire of love’s denial
and smoke the loving out.

But how sweet the smell of smoke
rising from a woodman’s fire
because only wood can burn  
in a bonfire of denial
while love remains triumphant
beyond the blue of sky!


Helen / 28 April 2005


© Copyright 2005 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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California
1 posted 2005-04-28 07:48 PM


Helen

"could it be the fires of hell
burning to a cinder
love’s magic and mystique?"

Oh, I think not!!  Hope not!!

"while love remains triumphant
beyond the blue of sky!"

Yes, that's better!  Hugs to you, dear Helen.  

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
2 posted 2005-04-28 08:24 PM


Enjoyed this much, my friend....really like the way you approached it...

j.

marcel
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since 2003-03-02
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az, usa
3 posted 2005-04-30 12:58 PM


beautifully and creatively penned!
Laoha
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since 2003-03-07
Posts 161
Nevada, USA
4 posted 2005-04-30 01:33 AM


"beyond the blue of sky!"

the words said itself.

LAOHA'S PEN


ice
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
5 posted 2005-04-30 05:24 AM


Helen
Good metaphors here.
I like how the poem unfolds, like the slow rising of smoke, that matches the title and theme...
enjoyed
---------ice
   ><>

passing shadows
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displaced
6 posted 2005-04-30 08:31 PM


I love a good wood fire, so I had to read this! much enjoyed!
DavePage
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7 posted 2005-05-01 05:23 PM


Yes I can smell it here

Dave

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