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of jaunty pizzicato |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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now the drama of the rain she is a slow movie window and her cellophane fit is the smothering mother to concrete children her temple voices are unthought holy sounds echos on the stones when they strum the wind with their bare breasts as a nightingale she sleeps pretending to be an owl for the sake of her shadow in case the sun returns without the messiah's warning she is the road to the hollow land that burrows the sky sides and the wings of the aeronauts dapple her shoulders with but a gravel's voice suggestion of jaunty pizzicato _________________ dark (scribblenote: rain and auto wrecking yard in d minor) |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
dark (scribblenote: rain and auto wrecking yard in d minor) i can only imagine the possibilities in this one, youre windows fly over the gates |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I would just love to crawl inside of your mind just once.....because you go to such wonderful places that hold such a fantastic way of seeing and hearing the world. Ya done good, real good with this one m'friend. Morning hugs babe... I really want to care, |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
You can do justice to even the negative and make the sounds like what it is...merely life, love, happiness and significance...like a violin strums direction to emotion...a light leading to the pursuit of happiness.... Well done!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
as a nightingale she sleeps pretending to be an owl for the sake of her shadow in case the sun returns without the messiah's warning she is the road to the hollow land that burrows the sky sides and the wings of the aeronauts dapple her shoulders with but a gravel's voice ~*~ It may be a wrecking yard... but I feel more from it...and for that? I smile with you. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thank you ladies for the eyes on my rain and junk yard still life... you all make me smile when I read your reviews..your prospectives...humble thanks again |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
No No!! Thank YOU for your poetry. Alot of your writings take my breath away!!! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS I love the sound of rain on different things...I have a alluminum boat upside down outside of bedroom window...I heard it drumming last night. Loved the sound of your poem too, pretty amazing, you and the rain!  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read  |
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