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soon, the Maypole dance (for sister serenity)
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soon, the Maypole dance (for sister serenity) |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia 
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In a feverish dance around an annual Maypole, drinking pure pristine good witches brew, I twined myself ‘round the strength of you ~young saplings grow tall under midnite’s gaze upwardly pushing lamp’s light through dark's maze~ bending and twisting, shouting in turn drinking from silver chalice, treasured golden urn, all hearts freed of sadness, malice and greed singing praises to cascading stars, the serendipitous sun and magical moon, flowering the verdant musing meadows, marking virgin hearts in a solo swoon ~young saplings grow tall under midnite’s gaze upwardly pushing lamp’s light through dark's maze~ oh, spring springs forth in renewed thrust, as nature's devinity calls to us, the glorious love of life's cyclic rebirthing forever resuscitating each living being |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
omg Kacy! I dont have the words for this piece of magic! yeah, it hit me there.....  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
smiling through tears, wow Kacey this is such a beautiful gift for our sister Serenity. Beautiful you.. i'll tuck this gently into my library. Mxx  "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" Michael Hutchence (INXS) P.S. I wish i had written this. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
sniffing here, thanking you two wonderful ladies |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"singing praises to cascading stars, the serendipitous sun and magical moon, flowering the verdant musing meadows, marking virgin hearts in a solo swoon" Oh Kacy...Serenity will love this. Yes..almost Beltain, and rebirth. Love this keeper...thank you!!! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kacy Agreeing with the others...this is wonderful!  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nicely done!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You made me smile, and thank you for keeping the spirit flowing for me Kacy. Much love to you my friend.  I too, wish I had written this. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
 really, a smile? so, let's dance on May first, and again on Mother's Day.  thanks to all the dancers |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I just had to read this again... adding to my library because i don't recall doing that the first time. Beautiful Kacey. Mxx "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This is quite good, Kacy. I am especially fond of your loosely-fashioned meter, never constraining you but always bringing a moderate touch of rhythm to the song. Irregular verse is difficult to accomplish without seeming sloppy, but you've controlled well the words you chose to put stress on, especially the slowing, spondaic flow of "lamp's light through dark's maze." Your use of verbs is also fantastic throughout this poem, and the way in which you give everything life is extremely effective, by animating the inanimate, while you yourself actually do relatively little in the poem. There's that sense of overwhelming, of awesomeness, and I really do like it. I think this is one of the best things I've read from you, actually, and I hope it doesn't bother you that you managed it in what seems like something of a departure. Were you imitating Serenity's style here? I know that your own style is hard to pin down (you're a very flexible writer), but I think your experiments in meter and mysticism should be pursued further. If you do, let me know via email, just to make sure I don't miss it. Again, this is wonderful, and I'm adding it to my private library (something I haven't done in a while). Glad to read you again, Kacy! Brian "God becomes as we are that we may be as he is." ~William Blake |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I twined myself ‘round the strength of you ~*~ Isn't that what sisters do? She feels the magic of this one... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
singing praises to cascading stars, the serendipitous sun and magical moon, flowering the verdant musing meadows, marking virgin hearts in a solo swoon ~young saplings grow tall under midnite’s gaze upwardly pushing lamp’s light through dark's maze~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Kacy I could have sworn I replied to this the day it was posted...this tardy moth just came back to say how lovely of an offering of your verse this is...and you know I was loving those allits... beautiful spiritual write for our Sen-girlie. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I was going to sit this one out this year too, Kacy...but a funny thing happened on the way to the grumps. Yesterday, I saw some candles marked down at a drug store, and so I decided to forego the beer I'd budgeted for and filled my lil shopping basket with as many as I could. (All types too, scented ones too!) When I got to the registered, it seems a co-worker had mis-managed the display, and all those groovy prices were too good to be true, but the cashier was so annoyed with her co-worker she gave them to me "as marked"--so sista kacy? I walked outta there with exactly 100 scented cancles AND a 24 oz. beer for the grand price of $2.84! grin Now all I need is a pole...  Anybody know where I can get one cheap?  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, I love that anecdote, Karen! I will dance around the neighborhood telephone pole if I have to, and then tell everyone your candle story made me do it wow, scented candles AND a beer? I am going to laugh all night now. So, we dance at what time on Sunday May 1? oh, that's right! before, and after midnight.  Thanking all of you for these wonderful replies, and for helping me dance a ring of loce around Karen. (Brian? I'm choking back a thank you tear.) |
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