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Mother of Christ |
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Suede Junior Member
since 2003-08-25
Posts 38Drifting on the soul |
I see the abandoned child Cradled by foster parents whose eyes he does not share Who retreat from his stare with little care or thought As i watch from the sky as a star, heading him north Feel my empty womb And acknowledge a solemn tear stroll south to the floor A Mothers needs, the worlds greeds As i sleep beneath the rain and hold close my pain Clasped and kissed the seas to stop my son from drowning But sometimes when slumbered beside the moon And dreams met reality I wished the surface had been broken Lost a Mothers love as i read through prayers And scorned at man's selfishness Who was there to help me? The world took my son from me! So, i ripped at the seams of Pilate til he mirrored the Devil And used him as a puppet to show my son that a mothers love is always right Sat beyond the clouds for a few nights, Til morning came And mourning came Removed the cross from a baby's hand, and sheltered him, maybe from myself? I couldnt belive what i had done, to my own child! Left him to rest But blew life back to him when i parted ways with my selfishness And became God again The Mother of Christ |
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Suede Junior Member
since 2003-08-25
Posts 38Drifting on the soul |
I would really appreciate an opinion on this!  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I have read this several times since it was posted, and I feel the depth of anguish...perhaps a child given up for adoption...or perhaps speaking to the current practice of abandoned babies in the world. There are always reasons for making such choices, and they are never pretty ones. To remind ourselves of the pain that individual must be in, and to approach these circumstances with compassion and insight would most likely eliminate at least half of the sorrow spent. Thank you for writing this so eloquently. TD |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Like TD, I have read this over several times, ultimately seeing the "become God again" line in the light of "giving up the son" to a better life. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Abandoned child Cradled by foster parents whose eyes he does not share Who retreat from his stare with little care or thought As I watch from the sky as a star, heading him north Feel my empty womb acknowledge a solemn tear stroll south to the floor As I sleep beneath the rain and hold close my pain Clasped and kissed the seas to stop my son from drowning Yet sometimes when slumbered beside the moon And dreams met reality I wished the surface had been broken Lost a Mothers love as I read through prayers And scorned at man's selfishness Who was there to help me? The world took my son So, I ripped at the seams of Pilate til he mirrored the Devil And used him as a puppet to show my son that a mother’s love is always good Sat beyond the clouds for a few nights, Til morning came And mourning came Removed the cross from a baby's hand, and sheltered him, maybe from myself. I couldn’t believe what I had done, to my own child. Left him to rest But blew life back to him when I parted ways with my selfishness And became God again The Mother of Christ ……………………………………. A thought. I think the line breaks important. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
The analogies you used were very thought provoking. Whether this is a poem personal to a decision made by you or someone you know or whether you are likening it to the real events of Mary and Jesus.....it is fascinating to ponder. Good write. ....jo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
As some of the previous readers commented, I was of more than one minds as to the real meaning behind the intricately woven words. A fascinating read that deserved a second read-through. Love & the Christ Light, EA |
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Suede Junior Member
since 2003-08-25
Posts 38Drifting on the soul |
Thanks all for the responses, greatly appreciated! Huan Yi...well pointed out! Thank |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Perhaps similar thoughts of a mother that has lost her son to war...James |
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