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Time Captured
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Time Captured |
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Aleta Member
since 2005-04-17
Posts 102Louisiana |
Time Captured Precious, the time together There it remains on the wall Cased in solid oak, softened By graceful arch bonnet trim Serpentine hands caressing A crème colored face But cherished minutes are frozen In a glance, not there rather Below on a pendulum swing in Beats per hour the clock designed to Make Westminister chimes No more create past this morning seven Delicate scrollwork motionless On an arc suspended in a fall Cast in golden shades inside the circle Curtains blowing in the breeze And there, naked linked arm to arm Greeting the morn in her splendor In mountain snow-capped serenity Reflections hugging, no seconds escape Duration of an endless snuggle Cocooned in a warm blanket Mirrored moment on a balcony No alarm clock, time caught to the brim On a solid upward stroke |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Time LIVED, and you share this precious awareness very beautifully. Love, Margherita  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
How beautiful this is!! For a moment time stood still. As I was reading, I found myself holding my breath... Wondeful write. Hugs~Nancy ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Aleta, Amazing poetry! I love your metaphoric description. This is such a gentle write... I look forward to reading more of your poetry. miscellanea |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Aleta "Duration of an endless snuggle Cocooned in a warm blanket Mirrored moment on a balcony No alarm clock, time caught to the brim On a solid upward stroke" All of it is beauty overlapping more beauty, but the last lines perfectly closed the poem and caused me to remember capturing time myself...thank you. |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Really nice feeling from your words Dave |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is beautiful !! hugs, Chris Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 well done! |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Wonderful imagery throughout this fine piece of writing. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Duration of an endless snuggle Cocooned in a warm blanket Mirrored moment on a balcony No alarm clock, time caught to the brim On a solid upward stroke Martie's right...the last lines close the poem perfectly. Enjoyed the imagery.  "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Delicate lace of warm, this is. Enjoyed it very much, Aleta. |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Great poem.Loveley images brought to mind. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
AletaMyFriend~ Am I ever grateful that you are here with us~  This is just a smidgen of the beauty of you~ Florida *sighs* at the very loveliness of this~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Wow! What an incredible write! I was blown away! My jaw is still on the floor. It was such a visually engaging, sweeping poem. I will be looking for more. Words simply fail me. This would fit well in my top ten list. It's one of those, "I wish I'd wrote it" poems. Amazing... Kevin |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
time captured... and breath stops... Mine did as I read... this is absolutely beautiful! *S* |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Wow, you have captured the moment perfectly with these vivid images! Well done! |
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Dautz Write Member
since 2004-11-16
Posts 96 |
written with such grace and skill ~Dautz |
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