Open Poetry #35 |
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learning to love a different religion |
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Greeneyes![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind ![]() |
He wears his shell well and I suffer his loneliness -- as we pass through fields and mourn another day lost I know again, tonight I wont sleep my faith gone in restful youth that I should turn away now all will be lost tonight the stars don't help they are not there, not real ~ that life has left us in pieces continues -- all these years learning to love a different religion the wish unheard stays within me a black stone-- the husk of my heart & summer will again pass-- and I will be left with the shadows of footprints weeping to once again fall into you ~~*~~ I'm Standing on a bridge I'm waitin in the dark I thought that you'd be here by now Theres nothing but the rain ~~**~~ [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (04-22-2005 10:33 PM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"the wish unheard stays within me a black stone-- the husk of my heart & summer will again pass-- and I will be left with the shadows of footprints weeping to once again fall into you " Lauren ![]() this touches me deeply...I am so keeping this... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
![]() I really want to care, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome "shadows of footprints" nice ending here |
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Aleta Member
since 2005-04-17
Posts 102Louisiana |
To know the limitations of time together is to feel the bitter sweetness of life, to laugh and cry at the same timeā¦. Powerful write. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"summer will again pass-- and I will be left with the shadows of footprints weeping to once again fall into you" Excellent write... thank you for this one pretty lady~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
you write a trance with your words - your talent leaving a loss of speech - Susan If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
An excellent work, dear Lauren, charged with melancholy. Love, Margherita |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren...As always, you sweep me away with your ability to write feeling so well. ![]() |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Absolutely lovely Lauren ![]() Mxx "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Ratleader![]()
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow! One of PiP's true creators sends forth another lesson....listen-up folks, this is how poetry is done! ---------- .....and these words.... the wish unheard stays within me a black stone-- the husk of my heart ....would you mind terribly if I stole them? |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Very well done! loved it. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...!!! You weave words with such grace and ease. Eric |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
I feel .... reborn with such blessings .... ![]() a fulfilling write! |
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Greeneyes![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
hey all thank you for such kind responses....I appreciate each of you stopping by to sign your name.... ![]() love to all..... ![]() Lauren~ ~~*~~ |
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