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Open Poetry #35

Prose World- ugh!

netsky
Member

since 2005-03-29

Posts 148
Miami

0 posted 2005-04-21 01:47 PM

This other world I begin to glimpse
has nothing but plain salts for sense
sans anything yeasty to make words rise
to higher, fluffier, loaf-bread size

Saltine!

I dreamt I woke in that  strange, strained place
where every word means an ex-act taste
and nothing more from them to savour
but only to box in the tongue's flavour

Herbicide!

Without a doubt,  that world was queer
Brown and weedy; no poesies dear
No precious Al's, but only Ill-usions
lied, not laid, in prosaic confusions

Recitation!

"Stocks rose higher in active trading while the NASDAQ index reacted vigorously to  the news that the semiconductor..."

Wake up!

An awful dream that was, was all,
where roses were locked in stocks, and all
that could be fed upon
was not even saltine
but silicon

DavePage
Member Elite

since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

1 posted 2005-04-21 04:10 PM

You've writen words but:

No audience, no delivery, no thought you haven't destroyed, no message.

You written for yourself and we all do that but "it is only for yourself".

It doesn't mean the talent isn't there; it is; what is missing is the audience.

Dave

TexUS
Member

since 2003-03-20

Posts 228

2 posted 2005-04-23 01:03 AM

Enjoyed the humor in this,
thanks for the

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

3 posted 2005-04-23 10:05 AM

Heh-heh-heh...'tain't so....about half of my poetry is actually prose, and I don't hear many complaints about it being flat....the key is, to do flavorful things no matter what you're writing -- something as mundane as a business memo can show humanity and creative use of language.

Here's some prose of mine....
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Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2005-04-23 10:58 AM

netsky
We write what we write and to only some a delight. Enjoyed

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