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Susan
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walking the surreal

0 posted 2005-04-18 10:20 PM


You are the flame
That fuels
Twilight’s burst
As sun sets
And moon rises
In green flash greeting
To the coming of night

The sizzle of gold
As it falls into
The cool blue bliss
Of eventide

You are the shimmer of stars
As they rise in rejoicing
Dancing to eventide’s serenade
Accompanied in time by
The beating
Of this woman’s heart

For you feed the amber
That cascades in want
Over my silver veiled gaze
The fevered longing for
The eyes of my lover
Upon me
In glowing favor

The love lust look
That devours my flesh
In tongue tip promise
And fingered fervor

Oh sweet capture
You hold my heart
in passion’s bondage
and endearment’s trust
ever your vassal
submitting to your heart’s desire
for this is my treasure

I shall dance for you
As that of a gypsy
And hunger for you
As that of the panther
I shall love you
As you have known no other
For in your heart, I am
s.a.t.

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

© Copyright 2005 s.a.t. - All Rights Reserved
MGROVES
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1 posted 2005-04-19 12:06 PM


wow  sensually beautiful way to express love~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

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2 posted 2005-04-19 01:11 AM


Susan that was THE most beautiful "you are" poem I have ever read, and I think this is my absolute favorite of yours to date.  
Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
3 posted 2005-04-19 01:26 AM


Susan, you left me breathless with your words ~ and I'm definitely straight!

You are one poetically expressive passion puppy! I love your poetry! ~ all of it!


Linda

passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2005-04-19 05:14 AM


oh

this is so sweet!

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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West Coast
5 posted 2005-04-19 07:58 AM


mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm soothsin
this woman
makes me want to...
well you know
don't you
showing open infection..(grin)

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

6 posted 2005-04-19 08:03 AM


there is a place in the world for each one of us, and you Lady, make our place a little better for it....

This was extremely passionate and visual...thank you!

Susan
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walking the surreal
7 posted 2005-04-19 10:15 AM


Oh, my friends - you all smile me with your warmth and kindness - if my computer ever starts working properly at home, I long to return and read and write more - alas - I think I have some electrical output that my computer doesn't like (grin) -

you are all in my heart, my friends -

Hugs - Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

EvocativeVerse2
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8 posted 2005-04-19 04:55 PM


I love this Susan...and it was nice of you to say all those wonderful things about me...what? It was not me you were talking about. LOL! Oh well...let me have the illusion. Bravo my friend. This needs to be bumped back up to the top of the page.
inkedgoddess
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Ohio
9 posted 2005-04-19 09:59 PM


nice and sensual
like a warm hazey summerdaydream

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
10 posted 2005-04-19 10:11 PM


Softly sensual...and much enjoyed!
Hugs~N

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain ~

Susan
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walking the surreal
11 posted 2005-04-19 11:12 PM


Kevin - thanks for the laughter my friend - you smile me

Inkked one - thank you kindly

Enchantress - you're a dear

Hugs all - Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

yv
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12 posted 2005-04-20 12:00 PM


Beautiful...Again you take my very breath away with your words.  Your words are not only poetry...they inspire poetry.   That was amazing.

Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent.

ice
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13 posted 2005-04-20 06:04 AM



Susan
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ice
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Pennsylvania
14 posted 2005-04-20 06:04 AM


Susan
Sorry about the blank reply.
After reading this poem my mind wandered off into sensual fantasy,
I thought I wrote something the first time, but I guess I was
"walking the surreal"

enjoyed
-----------ice/ford
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Susan
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walking the surreal
15 posted 2005-04-20 10:25 AM


yv - you are most kind and I blush - thank you -

Ford - you smile me and gift me laughter, thank you for the delight of your reply-

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Ericc
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16 posted 2005-04-20 02:31 PM


Beautiful!

Eric

froggy
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17 posted 2005-04-20 03:03 PM


I like this one.
Enjoyed the read.

:-)

Today the pond tomorrow the world

Susan
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walking the surreal
18 posted 2005-04-20 03:14 PM


thank you Eric - for the lovely reply

Froggy - am glad I could give you a bit of enjoyment -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
19 posted 2005-04-20 07:26 PM


Delicious...James
Goldenrose
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20 posted 2005-04-21 04:26 AM


Moving...

Goldenrose.

Justice cannot be for oneside alone, but must be for both. (Eleanor Roosevelt)

Susan
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walking the surreal
21 posted 2005-04-21 10:42 AM


Smiling at you both - thank you- S

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

DavePage
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Posts 2917

22 posted 2005-04-22 04:56 PM


Susan

I dont know why I thought of Blazing Saddles whilst I read this but Bart hitting the Overseer over the head with a shovel echo'd through your words

Dave

Susan
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walking the surreal
23 posted 2005-04-22 05:16 PM


Dave - you make me laugh - thank you for the smile -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

babygirlwlove
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New York City
24 posted 2005-04-22 08:06 PM


damn~that's niiice~

love&light,

**babygirL

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

Rick
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Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia
25 posted 2005-04-22 08:14 PM


Dear Susan, this was beautiful, making me hope for the same feeling of love, your words painted such pictures, it was just wonderful, so well done.

Sincerely
Rick

Susan
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walking the surreal
26 posted 2005-04-22 11:31 PM


thank you babygrl - most kind

Am pleased you found it so Rick - thank you

Hugs to you both - Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

suthern
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27 posted 2005-04-26 04:25 PM


You are the shimmer of stars
As they rise in rejoicing
Dancing to eventide’s serenade
Accompanied in time by
The beating
Of this woman’s heart

For you feed the amber
That cascades in want
Over my silver veiled gaze
The fevered longing for
The eyes of my lover
Upon me
In glowing favor

Absolutely gorgeous!!! I don't say this often, but when I do... it's sincere... I wish I had written this. *S*

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