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soul drifter
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0 posted 2005-04-17 12:10 PM


Graveyards in the Rain

I still remember before she dyed her hair
she had a simple flower glow to her
when things began to change, I don't remember
but I should never have left her there...

I left her there, cold and alone
like a graveyard in the rain
she carried on a conversation
with my shadow that remained
she carried a braid of her once blond hair
in her little bag, alongside Shakespeare
and pulls her punches in the wet air
then cradles herself and disappears
I change my mind, and follow her down
I know exactly where to find her
in the worst part of town
shivering in a dark corner

She carves her weak little bones
into stars and crescent moons
keeps her personality hidden
in a quiet dusty room
the same kind of room she grew up in
alone, miles removed from life
now she's exposed, out in the open
erased emotions like negative film
when the sun hits her like a cannonball
she says she still remembers him
her father's face hovering, awaiting her fall
across the floor she'd crawl for a man's affections

Graveyards in the rain cannot compare
to the clipped wing heart she bares for me
as she slouches like a weeping willow tree
Catherine only goes where sunlight doesn't dare

The world isn't for her, she says over and over again
like a skipping record or a dripping faucet
I should've been listening, as we stood there in the rain
as her shadow revealed the details on a gravestone
I've heard her same soul speaking to me before
a long time ago, when we tried to be together
maybe I'm to blame for her living like an open sore
she was in love with the way the raindrops felt to her
mingling with the blood in her veins
going to her head, and sending her images
of what to do with the enormity of her pain
she lied to me and said she needed to rest

Black train on winter-rusted tracks only bear witness
to her ripped bleeding heart, her sickness and erosion
I'm making my way to her, but it's like in slow-motion
Catherine only glows in her lilting flower prettyness

Catherine only goes where sunlight doesn't dare
I only wish I could've shown her that I cared...

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

© Copyright 2005 Zach Hilgefort - All Rights Reserved
freewheelin
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1 posted 2005-04-17 12:31 PM


sad and melancholy, it is really haunting near the end. the last line just showed the great tragedy of the whole situation. nicely writ.
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2 posted 2005-04-17 12:39 PM


my gosh...the way you write is so emotional and just wraps the reader in your words...
this is so touching...

Margherita
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3 posted 2005-04-17 01:44 PM


You care so much to write this heartwrenching piece in a masterful way.
It hurts.
Love, Margherita

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2005-04-17 01:51 PM



~ tearfully tragic...

But you wrote it masterfully!!!


EA

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5 posted 2005-04-17 04:28 PM


There is obviously a lot more than this to your words excellently written

Dave

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6 posted 2005-04-17 05:02 PM


brought tears to my eyes~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

IndigoEve
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7 posted 2005-04-17 08:15 PM


Oh...
my.

It grips you by the soul.

If I were to touch you, would you bleed a velvet river, running miracles through the sodden ground? --Moi

Susan Caldwell
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8 posted 2005-07-01 01:21 PM


this is heart wrenching...

we all have a Catherine.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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