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Dream of Fernando
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Dream of Fernando |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Dream of Fernando He looked like my first love, from Avila, dark eyes with something behind them that was hard. He pulled me from a boat licking against a pier far away from my home, although the sound of the old wood was like my grandmother’s rocking chair. I was sent to be watchful pero asustado realmente y solamente, I remember drinking something pink that made me dizzy; and later driving with him down streets filled with snow. It was night far too long when I realized that in this place there was no day. I was wearing hiking boots and full skirt, the knife that they gave me cold and hard against my ankle. The shawl he put around me was soft and black like his eyes as he told me it was his mothers. I knew trust wasn’t a word any longer but I did it anyway. Everything was from the time before, except I knew that in the layers of my shirt I still carried my cell phone. So, in the back room out of sight of the mirrors I watched Fernando make a deal with some gringo. (all the time that song, “Hernando’s Hideaway” playing) And I wanted to dance close with someone no, that’s not true with him, because his eyes looked into me and saw that I was really not me at all, but someone else, and I wanted to tell him to be careful, he was the only one that knew. Then I dialed your number and it rang and rang and rang and no one answered. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Gosh Martie, you paint perfectly another side of life that so many live with, and sometimes choose... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Goosebumps! You have touched upon mystery's shores, dear Martie. A jump into a different section of the Now. Perfectly penned. Love, Margherita |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a dream... a wonderful segue into a book... hint hint hint |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Kari is right! go for it girl....Magnifique dear Martie. one for my library. Mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your versality in writing is showing, Dear Martie!  ~ and you are a fine raconteur as well!  Linda |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
OMG! I began to hum that hideaway song from the title alone! Incredible, what this write makes me feel, makes the song and moment more real than just what the memories can provide. Dang. KEEPING this. "It was night far too long when I realized that in this place there was no day." Oh yeah. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
well, I realized after going back to read this again...for the manyeth time, that I got the song wrong. In the dream, (which was very real, by the way) the name was Fernando...but in the song..it's "Hernando's Hideaway". Must be a different guy. Anyway, I changed it. Thanks so much for reading! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Here's the trick...take it from one who has dreamed many dreams only to awaken in a ringing, wringing darkness: In the dream....be sure you call the right number. See what you did??? You carried me right along, so that I responded to what the poem is saying, rather than the written words..... anybody looking for a definition of good writing? Don't look here for it; go read the poem at the top of this thread, and see some. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
but in dreams it was answered before it even rang enjoyed this lady |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Le saludo, pero recuerdo: Nunca el baile con un hombre que debe sostener secretos a fin de vivir. *smile* *hug* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A joy to read...James |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Stunned........I love reading dreams. Felt like I was there. ......jo |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Wow! Why do I relate? Suppose i've dialed a few wrong numbers because of impatience! Enjoyed, Martie. And here I thought this was going to be about Ferdinand the Bull! I so enjoy your writing. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This is quite a mysterious piece, Martie. Remarkedly like a dream and yet i see you somewhere in the darkest Mexico, hiking over the mountains in the jungles. Corinne |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Wonderful writing, dear Martie. And, it seemed so real, too. Hugs,  |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - what a great poem - so vivid and so well done - I just love reading what you write - Paul |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
 what an enjoyable read regards sudhir |
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