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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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With a white smile, the pretty girl— Tips herself Into a jar |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
OK, John, Ya got me on this one.... I am thinking the girl is pretty, with pretty teeth (white smile) and that the "jar" represents her cosmetics? I am probably miles away from this poems intent, but I just had to ask... 'cause "even a blind hog finds an acorn once in a while"... -----------ice ><> |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Ice, You’ve never seen a tip jar set out on a bar? (Mo Szlak in The Simpsons has one). The interpretation of the meaning then I leave to you and others, ( I can see at least two ways of reading it). (-: |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Has me a bit baffled too. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I like it |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
With a white smile, the pretty girl— Tips herself Into a jar Wanting everything She smiles From a jar Always open In a mile She goes far Seeking images in her mind In desire She goes far Understanding in her mind In a jar She doesn't go far Written more than I meant to Huan Yi You write excellent words Dave |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Wow. So simplistic yet so full of meaning. I really felt this one. It blew me from the second I read it. It is depressing to me how easily the Beautiful Ones fall from grace as vice and vicarious living ruins their innocence. Lovely write. Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
yv “fall from grace” Very good. This was the “other” understanding I experienced as well To me it reads like a senryu in translation where your choice of mood determines interpretation; much like the anonymous: “How long forever Nineteen nineteen Of white dancers” which can be understood as a comic comment or a lament. Thanks All for reading. John |
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Drauntz Member Elite
since 2007-03-16
Posts 2905Los Angeles California |
funny. selfpity and self proud both can make her into the jar. |
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