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latearrival
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0 posted 2005-02-19 07:29 AM



This Relationship



This relationship is wrong

I don’t want it any more.

I can live with that decision

Until.....

The day comes to an end

And I haven’t heard from you.



Even as I tell myself

It really doesn’t matter,

A large part of me

Is waiting…..

For the telephone to ring.



And if it’s you

On the other end.

I am content,

To go about my day.



But… When you are not there,

A shadow slowly passes

And puts my heart to sleep,

With a shiver that creeps

Into my soul.



I tell myself that I can let it end,

That I’m not waiting for your call.

Until,the hours slip past,

And I haven’t heard your voice,

And the loneliness begins.



I think so many thoughts,

Make resolutions to amend,

And bring this situation to an end.

Until night begins to fall,

And I haven’t had a call.



It is then I know I love you

And need you in my life.

But I must remember

That you still have a wife.

jo perry

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nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2005-02-19 08:47 AM


I could have written this myself..except  for the last verse...

M

passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2005-02-19 12:54 PM


marty, you are so precious...so understanding

thank you for this

latearrival
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3 posted 2005-02-19 01:59 PM


naked thoughts: Thanks for responding.I am sorry it hits home. life it seems is not often fair.

Dixie: Thank you, you know I care. marty

suthern
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4 posted 2005-02-21 12:22 PM


Recently, a friend wrote some poems for me. That, in and of itself, would have been a priceless gift. *S* But when each word let me know she knew my heart as well as I do... and loved me - warts, mistakes and all - enough to put herself in my shoes and mind... I knew I was truly blessed.

I think you've shown that same empathy here for your friend... and I know it will mean just as much to her. *S* Well done! *S*

passing shadows
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5 posted 2005-02-21 12:30 PM


suthern is right
A Romantic Heart
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6 posted 2005-02-22 07:27 AM


Some good stuff here!
understanding your heart and feeling it!
~ARh

We attract hearts by the qualities we display, we retain them by the qualities we possess.~Jean Baptiste Antoine Suard


LeeJ
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7 posted 2005-02-22 07:49 AM


how many times has each of us experienced this, and each time seems more emotional...more challenging to say the least...well written and expressed...

Hugs to you

latearrival
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8 posted 2005-02-22 10:57 AM


Oh dear,thank you Suthern, Romantic Heart  LeeJ and Passing Shadows:
I know the young lady to whom this was sent, approves my posting it, but to hear from all of you, Thank you, I appreciate the reading and replies. marty

JL
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9 posted 2005-02-22 06:00 PM


"It is then I know I love you
And need you in my life.
But I must remember
That you still have a wife.
jo perry"

.

Yeikes!!
Careful.  
Excellent write,with a surprise ending.
JL



latearrival
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10 posted 2005-02-23 04:34 AM


JL: Thank you for reading and for your kind words. but careful? I don't know how it applies? marty
miscellanea
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11 posted 2005-05-26 02:36 PM


After I saw your name on my post, I wanted to thank you, and I became curious about your writing.  I'm glad I dropped by!  It sounds like you are a very caring friend.

           miscellanea  

Gentle Spirit
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12 posted 2005-05-26 02:57 PM


A beautiful sharing of your heart!
adagio
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13 posted 2005-05-26 03:20 PM


Very well done!
enjoyed very much.

Earth Angel
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14 posted 2005-05-26 04:12 PM


Whew! My heart started beating fast recalling how I felt during times of rough waters in a relationship.

jo, this was amazingly realistic and I commend you on your compassionate heart and this beautifully empathetic and caring poem.


Linda

latearrival
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15 posted 2005-05-26 04:57 PM


WOW! You have all, Linda, miscellanea, gentle spirit and Adagio made my day. This was well off the page, and to have you all  read and write such nice things pleases me. Thank you all... martyjo
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