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| Open Poetry #35 |
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The Noon of Night |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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The Noon of Night ©2005 C.G. Ward not quite the noon of night and already the silence is oppressive. she's sleeping in the other room, but i still hear the stir of her disappointment as it rustles the sheets. i said silence, didn’t i? but we all know silence isn’t real these days, it’s just a metaphor for the homogenized version of societal depression we all pray to from 9 to night. on the road at the office on the road and even in the bar, with the will-sucking neon nazis burning our skins into a fluorescent tan... that one over there, that girl in the corner – yeah, she stickered her abdomen with a star so at least some portion of her life would remain pure amidst the scars of too many beers, not enough sleep and the sticky taste on her lips in the morning. yeah, she’s a regular – for the silence of it all, don’t you know. but i was talking about my absence down the hall - got distracted, or, perhaps explained it... i don’t really know. i’ll figure it out tomorrow; the anthem’s on the tube and i’ve gotta stand. egowhores.com - really love yourself. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
in the silence, we hear too much sometimes...  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
the anthem’s on the tube and i’ve gotta stand. ~*~ Great ending, Christopher! Imagery great, lights filtered just so, the smell of the bar...even though you didn't TALK of smell, came through. Excellent! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Ah, Christopher.... awesome. Yep. hugs, Chris "The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze." |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
boy I have sorely missed your poetry...this was excellent...could taste, touch and feel every single word...wonderfully expressed...whewwww Happy Friday! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful imagery here Chris..great write. Good to see you posting again. I have missed reading your work. Hugs~Nancy For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Christopher A good write and I enjoyed the read. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"she's sleeping in the other room, but i still hear the stir of her disappointment as it rustles the sheets. i said silence, didn’t i?" and "but i was talking about my absence down the hall - got distracted, or, perhaps explained it... i don’t really know. i’ll figure it out tomorrow; the anthem’s on the tube and i’ve gotta stand." C...Your writing is one of the (few) reasons I continue to read at Pip. And this one is now among my favorites of yours. I understand it, very much enjoyed it and so badly...wish I'd written it. Damn fine job bud...  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Wow that was GREAT! I felt like a fly on the wall of your mind in this write Christoper, and ditto the porch puppy. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
the reading of this was worth much more than the time I have utilized reading it... in other words, it is really good...  regards sudhir |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Brilliant write...I gotta read more of your stuff. "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
hey thanks all - soul drifter, you'll have to go back if you want to read much... my writes have been limited as of late (i even wrote a prose piece - first in some time and it didn't seem to go over to well. i'm hoping it was the length and not the story!) egowhores.com - really love yourself. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You get props just for "noon of night" (that's one of those things I read and think, "I shoulda thoughta that, dammit" and silence...man, I shoulda thoughta that too. The things I hear in silence...but after reading, I suppose you know, don't you? sighness  |
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time prophet Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 371In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees |
The brain hurts, I'll try to figure it out tomorrow. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
yeah, she’s a regular – for the silence of it all, don’t you know. Yea, I know! You are such a fabulous poet, Christopher!! Impressive, as only you can write~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Christopher, Mature writing for a man so young; and poignant as well. I like the travel of the tone. And yes, silence is pretty much non-existent (except perhaps in the desert early in the morning before the winds come up) and silence is probably not what we really want, is it? Corinne |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"but i still hear the stir of her disappointment as it rustles the sheets." and even the smallest rustle overcomes the silence, every time and then, the salute *sigh* |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
there is such a sadness in this, even in the last lines of the stand....you bring her to life though and with amazing imagery....sadly work keeps' me busy, but I had to let you know I was "here" and read you..... ~~*~~ |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
looks like i'm wading through some older pieces i didn't have the grace to reply to. again, i thank all of you who so kindly not only read my drivel, but also pretend to like it.  |
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