I Should Have Known When To Fold 'em

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icebox
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since 2003-05-03

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in the shadows

0 posted 2005-04-14 05:50 PM

These playing fields
appear to me overgrown,
and yet somehow still
the same as in my youth,
when always fleet of foot,
slick and swift,
I raced laughing
past the pitfalls,
beyond deadfalls,
the easy opportunities
all seeming endless
where today on these same trails
I am amongst the halt and lame.

Hot breath
riffles the tall grass
lining these stalking trails,
just a hint
of sound above the gentle breeze,
I sense more than feel
the draw of claws flexed
time and time again.

Love can be a flower
soft scented for the mind,
a feather floating
giving flight to locked down souls,
love can be a comfort,
bluff shield against the cold of age,
a measure on which
the lost may choose to gauge their worth;
this day it is a predator
bold and hungry on the prowl,
and I am on the water path
heart leaping to my throat.

©2005 by icebox

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

1 posted 2005-04-14 06:02 PM

"Love can be a flower
soft scented for the mind,
a feather floating
giving flight to locked down souls,
love can be a comfort,
bluff shield against the cold of age,
a measure on which
the lost may choose to gauge their worth;
this day it is a predator
bold and hungry on the prowl,
and I am on the water path
heart leaping to my throat."

Oh wow..this last stanza builds so powerfully.
Love the ending..felt as though my heart was in my throat.
Excellent write, much enjoyed.
Hugs~Nancy

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

2 posted 2005-04-14 06:05 PM

Thanks!

ShiningWindHaze
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since 2004-09-06

Posts 138
California, United States

3 posted 2005-04-14 08:42 PM

I don't know what to think.
I'm stuck in this strange feeling of
wonderment
the words you spoke seem so far beyond
me
I'm stuck in my youth and I can't understand you...
I felt the power though...
I know it means much to you.

- Kaos

passing shadows
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displaced

4 posted 2005-04-14 09:25 PM

always love you

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2005-04-14 09:49 PM

icebox
I know the feeling, well done.

majnu

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since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

6 posted 2005-04-14 11:24 PM

wonderful.

i do not know what more to say.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

time prophet
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since 2003-07-30

Posts 371
In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees

7 posted 2005-04-14 11:39 PM

Knowing when to fold is one thing, knowing when to hold is better. You write as one who knows both.

longte
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since 2005-04-06

Posts 199
Australia

8 posted 2005-04-14 11:46 PM

Just read several of your posts

Simple things writen about well

Live It

Honeybunch
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South Africa

9 posted 2005-04-15 02:21 AM

icebox - this is wonderful! You're pretty amazing, you know.

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

10 posted 2005-04-16 01:40 PM

Thank you all very much for reading and taking time to comment. I never seem to have the time I need to do both read others' poetry and reply to others' thoughts on mine. Most times I would rather read poetry, but I really do appreciate your thoughts.

MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

11 posted 2005-04-18 03:55 AM

yes you are amazing~
    a wise soul~
learning alot from your words
  of wisdom~   glad to have been given
  the chance

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

12 posted 2005-04-18 09:32 AM

*gulp*

uh huh.

If I could sit in a cafe' surrounded by you and a few others on this site..I would be content just to listen with eyes closed and absorb all the trueness.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

13 posted 2005-04-18 11:19 AM

This may be trite, but it is ever so true, youth is wasted on the young.

If only we knew then what we know now.

Another fine spill from thy quill, sire.

EA

Martie

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14 posted 2005-04-18 11:51 AM

icebox

"Love can be a flower
soft scented for the mind,
a feather floating
giving flight to locked down souls,
"love can be a comfort,
bluff shield against the cold of age,
a measure on which
the lost may choose to gauge their worth;
this day it is a predator
bold and hungry on the prowl,
and I am on the water path
heart leaping to my throat."

Yes, it can be all those things, even though most choose to see it only one way. Your poem is enlightening.

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